You borrowed some books from your school or college library. Unfortunately, you have to go away to visit a sick relative and cannot return the books in time

Essay topics:

You borrowed some books from your school or college library. Unfortunately, you have to go away to visit a sick relative and cannot return the books in time

Dear Mr Alfred,

I am a 3rd year nursing major student and a regular borrower of books from our college library. I have borrowed two reference books from the library a week ago but I am afraid I cannot return them in time. I am writing to request an extension to the return date to avoid any penalty or fine.

I have borrowed two books titled 'Psychiatric Nursing 5th Edition' by Sheila Videbeck and 'Psychology for Nurses' by Harold Mcgarry on 15th September from the college library. My library card number is 442805 and these two books were issued to this card. My due date to return these books is tomorrow. However, it is very unfortunate that my grandmother has been admitted to a hospital in my hometown due to her heart failure and I will travel to Manila, the capital of the Philippines to visit her. I guess at the time you are reading this letter, I am on my way to Manila. I will probably stay there a couple of days and thus unable to return the books before the deadline.

Considering my situation, I am hoping you would permit me to keep the books four more days. Kindly, extend the return date to 27th September so that I can avoid any fine or penalty for late submission.

I am expecting your kind consideration regarding this matter.

Yours sincerely,

Lyn Olivar

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 207, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...am afraid I cannot return them in time. I am writing to request an extension to t...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...n date to avoid any penalty or fine. I have borrowed two books titled Psychiat...
^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, regarding, so, thus, i guess, i am afraid

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 32.9175257732 109% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 26.3917525773 110% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1063.0 937.175257732 113% => OK
No of words: 233.0 206.0 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.56223175966 4.54256449028 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.90696013833 3.78020617076 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5422293121 2.54303337028 100% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 127.690721649 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.600858369099 0.622605031667 97% => OK
syllable_count: 339.3 290.88556701 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.13402061856 142% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.3038192752 44.8134815571 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.7692307692 76.5299724578 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9230769231 16.8248392259 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.23076923077 4.34317383033 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.296698273608 0.216113520407 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100322396839 0.0766984524023 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0707777369099 0.0603063233224 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155336808114 0.12726935374 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0891097720963 0.0580467560999 154% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 8.37731958763 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 70.7449484536 89% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 7.45979381443 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.87 8.71597938144 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 7.59969072165 104% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 41.2886597938 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 8.62886597938 104% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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