You are studying a short course in another country. your accommodation was arranged by the course provider. there is a major problem with the accommodation.write a letter to the course provider. in your letter,say what the problem isdescribe the accommoda

Essay topics:

You are studying a short course in another country. your accommodation was arranged by the course provider. there is a major problem with the accommodation.

write a letter to the course provider. in your letter,

say what the problem is
describe the accommodation you thought you were getting
ask the provider to solve the problem

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing this letter to address the difficulties facing in the accommodation you have provided for the 3Dmax crash course.

Firstly, i would like to mention the air condition inside my room is not working, due to which the room feels suffocated by noon and have to leave open the window to get some fresh air. Secondly, by the evening, there are noise disturbance from the corridor and can hear children playing football outside my door. This is effecting my concentration in studies.

I was expecting to get an accommodation with better ventilation facility and environment friendly as mentioned in your advertisement. Atleast a quiet place could help me to maintain consistent concentration to studies.

Kindly request to repair the air condition to have a better environment to study and also request to address the corridor noise issue to the building management, so they could take necessary action.

Awaiting your earliest positive response.

Yours faithfully,

John Honai.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 10, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...for the 3Dmax crash course. Firstly, i would like to mention the air condition...
^
Line 7, column 24, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'accommodation'.
Suggestion: accommodation
...n in studies. I was expecting to get an accommodation with better ventilation facility and en...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 32.9175257732 43% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 26.3917525773 87% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 3.85567010309 337% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 862.0 937.175257732 92% => OK
No of words: 160.0 206.0 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.3875 4.54256449028 119% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.55655882008 3.78020617076 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02363088852 2.54303337028 119% => OK
Unique words: 108.0 127.690721649 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.675 0.622605031667 108% => OK
syllable_count: 256.5 290.88556701 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.13402061856 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.7167294814 44.8134815571 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.7777777778 76.5299724578 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7777777778 16.8248392259 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.11111111111 4.34317383033 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0946585704098 0.216113520407 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0420986575461 0.0766984524023 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0451500366053 0.0603063233224 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0539483452763 0.12726935374 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0380999873192 0.0580467560999 66% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 8.37731958763 153% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 70.7449484536 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 7.45979381443 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 8.71597938144 157% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 7.59969072165 106% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 41.2886597938 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 8.62886597938 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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