You are working for a company. Your computer is giving some problem and it is affecting your work. Write a letter to the manager in your letter.-Describe the problem-Explain how it is affecting your work-Write what want him to regarding it

Essay topics:

You are working for a company. Your computer is giving some problem and it is affecting your work. Write a letter to the manager in your letter.

-Describe the problem

-Explain how it is affecting your work

-Write what want him to regarding it

Dear sir,

I am writing this letter to have your attention on my problem. Let me explain in detail.

my name is Lisa and I work in sale department. my computer have some problem that affect my job. I think the screen had go wrong because I turned on the computer so many times but it had no signal. The CPU did not work and it was too hot so I am afraid it may burn. The issue happened today and I called the leader but there was no response. I can not go on my work and in my laptop has my important documents so i hope you can solve this problem imediately. I accquire you call the technique to check the system and give me new computer if need be.

I am looking forward to hearing from you

your sincerely

lisa

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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Dear sir, I am writing this letter to have your at...
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...y problem. Let me explain in detail. my name is Lisa and I work in sale departm...
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... is Lisa and I work in sale department. my computer have some problem that affect ...
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Suggestion: gone
...t affect my job. I think the screen had go wrong because I turned on the computer ...
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Suggestion: gone
...t affect my job. I think the screen had go wrong because I turned on the computer ...
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...my laptop has my important documents so i hope you can solve this problem imediat...
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...em and give me new computer if need be. I am looking forward to hearing from you...
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...nd give me new computer if need be. I am looking forward to hearing from you ...
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...I am looking forward to hearing from you your sincerely lisa
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rd to hearing from you your sincerely lisa
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, look, may, so, as to, i think, i am afraid

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 32.9175257732 91% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 26.3917525773 38% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 582.0 937.175257732 62% => OK
No of words: 143.0 206.0 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.06993006993 4.54256449028 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.45807182446 3.78020617076 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.26685632235 2.54303337028 89% => OK
Unique words: 87.0 127.690721649 68% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.608391608392 0.622605031667 98% => OK
syllable_count: 186.3 290.88556701 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 14.0 16.3608247423 86% => OK
Sentence length SD: 25.5438838081 44.8134815571 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 58.2 76.5299724578 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.3 16.8248392259 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.1 4.34317383033 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 10.0 2.54639175258 393% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 7.41237113402 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 1.49484536082 268% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254266647912 0.216113520407 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0910431589213 0.0766984524023 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0726143589666 0.0603063233224 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148989364983 0.12726935374 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0979055551948 0.0580467560999 169% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 4.9 8.37731958763 58% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 82.65 70.7449484536 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.2 7.45979381443 70% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 5.73 8.71597938144 66% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.76 7.59969072165 89% => OK
difficult_words: 22.0 41.2886597938 53% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 8.62886597938 58% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 8.54432989691 89% => OK
text_standard: 5.0 8.15463917526 61% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 150 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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