You decided to volunteer as an umpire for cricket match between two schools You has a bitter experience being an umpire Shae your sad story with you friend In your letter 1 Describe the names of teams and their rivalry details 2 Say what went wrong during

Essay topics:

You decided to volunteer as an umpire for cricket match between two schools. You has a bitter experience being an umpire. Shae your sad story with you friend.
In your letter
1) Describe the names of teams and their rivalry details
2) Say what went wrong during the game
3) Describe what you opine of with regard to your decision

Dear Raman,

I hope you find this letter in radiant health and best of spirits. I am writing this letter to share my bitter experience with you while doing the charity umpiring for a club.

Every year, our local council organize the cricket matches between the schools in order to encourage the sports spirit in youth. Last week, there was a final match between the “Indian Public School” and “Patel Public School” and I got the chance to do umpiring for this math. Both the schools were in final last year also, but “Indian” school won the trophy. Hence, in this match one team was trying to retain their winning track record while other was in a chance to break it.

During first half everything was working fine, but in second half “Patel school” boys started using their own balls instead of common balls which were very hard that it can cause the injury to batsman. When I protested for the same, they did not listen to me and unfortunately, I have to stop the match there itself.

However, in my opinion, one should not opt for umpiring in such type of events instead should go for coaching students in this files.

Looking forward to hear your though process on my view-point.

Best regards,
Amrinder

Votes
Average: 8.6 (3 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 123, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...tead should go for coaching students in this files. Looking forward to hear your ...
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Line 11, column 17, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[7]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'to hearing'.
Suggestion: to hearing
...dents in this files. Looking forward to hear your though process on my view-point. ...
^^^^^^^
Line 14, column 9, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...y view-point. Best regards, Amrinder
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, look, second, so, while, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 32.9175257732 76% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 26.3917525773 102% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1055.0 937.175257732 113% => OK
No of words: 215.0 206.0 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90697674419 4.54256449028 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.82921379641 3.78020617076 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58734282383 2.54303337028 102% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 127.690721649 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.637209302326 0.622605031667 102% => OK
syllable_count: 302.4 290.88556701 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.13402061856 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.463917525773 862% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.0077473087 44.8134815571 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.9090909091 76.5299724578 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5454545455 16.8248392259 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.54545454545 4.34317383033 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.137408603705 0.216113520407 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0522687872713 0.0766984524023 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0445229765222 0.0603063233224 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0753417623883 0.12726935374 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0471318472753 0.0580467560999 81% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 8.37731958763 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 70.7449484536 98% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 7.45979381443 111% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 8.71597938144 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 7.59969072165 104% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 41.2886597938 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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