You have bought a new mobile phone and in a few days after purchase it has stopped working. You spoken to the company representative a week ago but the phone has still not been repaired.
Write a letter to the company. In your letter
– introduce yourself
– explain the situation
– say what action you would like to company to take.
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing this letter to express my disappointment regard to the my cell phone that I have purchased from the your center store on Friday 28th of December.
Last week , when I visited the shopping mall , I decided to bought an Apple X through your sales representative's advices.
At first times , the all programs worked properly and the flash of camera was enough good to take picture.
However , after usaging just one week , the problems started to appear related to important features.
Firstly , I could not read any message on the screen because of the getting dark screen and the mobile phone started shutting down during the conversation with someone. On the other hand, its charge rate is not useful and long in compared to the same brand models.
To resolve this problem immediately , I request full refund money that I pay in advance or it would be perfect action that it changes with new one without paying any fee.
I am looking forward to hearing a prompt solution in this matter.
Yours faithfully.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...this letter to express my disappointment regard to the my cell phone that I have ...
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Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'my'?
Suggestion: the; my
...to express my disappointment regard to the my cell phone that I have purchased from t...
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Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'your'?
Suggestion: the; your
...y cell phone that I have purchased from the your center store on Friday 28th of December...
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Line 4, column 10, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... on Friday 28th of December. Last week , when I visited the shopping mall , I de...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... week , when I visited the shopping mall , I decided to bought an Apple X through ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ugh your sales representatives advices. At first times , the all programs worked...
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Line 5, column 15, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...presentatives advices. At first times , the all programs worked properly and th...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...camera was enough good to take picture. However , after usaging just one week , ...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... enough good to take picture. However , after usaging just one week , the probl...
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Line 6, column 38, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... However , after usaging just one week , the problems started to appear related ...
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Line 6, column 79, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
..., the problems started to appear related to important features. Firstly , I coul...
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Line 7, column 8, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...related to important features. Firstly , I could not read any message on the scr...
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Line 9, column 36, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
.... To resolve this problem immediately , I request full refund money that I pay ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, look, so, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.48453608247 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 32.9175257732 67% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 26.3917525773 102% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 869.0 937.175257732 93% => OK
No of words: 179.0 206.0 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85474860335 4.54256449028 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.65774358864 3.78020617076 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56140339936 2.54303337028 101% => OK
Unique words: 129.0 127.690721649 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.720670391061 0.622605031667 116% => OK
syllable_count: 258.3 290.88556701 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 1.44329896907 277% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 12.6804123711 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 16.3608247423 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 50.518301292 44.8134815571 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.625 76.5299724578 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.375 16.8248392259 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 4.34317383033 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.29896907216 163% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 13.0 2.54639175258 511% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.155222899169 0.216113520407 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0510903212047 0.0766984524023 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0465992401841 0.0603063233224 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0561172069291 0.12726935374 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0520453250874 0.0580467560999 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 8.37731958763 150% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 70.7449484536 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 7.45979381443 127% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 8.71597938144 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 7.59969072165 113% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 41.2886597938 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 8.54432989691 126% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.