YOU HAVE A FULL TIME JOB AND ARE ALSO DOING A PART TIME EVENING COURSE. YOU NOW FIND THAT YOU CANNOT CONTINUE THE COURSE.WRITE A LETTER TO YOUR TUTOR. IN YOU LETTER:•describe the situation•explain why you cannot continue at this time•say what action

Dear Mr. pattrick,
I am writing to bring to your attention that I can not continue a part time coure about fashion technology for which I had enrolled myself on 15th of last month.
Unfortunately, my compony has got some extra orders from Horizin Computers for supplying urgent computer accessories by the end of this year. Owing to this traumatic situation, I am working twelve hour shift from today.
I know it will be difficult for you to consider my request in the middle of the semister. I am not asking any refund, but i am rethinking to start this course later sometime the following year. It will be appreciated, if you would instruct the accounting department to adjust my fee for the next session.
I lookforward to hearing from you soon.

Yours sincerely,
Reza Afshar

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 28, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
... Davood My name is Reza Afshar and i am part-time piano student in your inst...
^
Line 4, column 74, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...art-time piano student in your institute .I am working in travel agency from 8AM -...
^^
Line 4, column 76, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: I
...t-time piano student in your institute .I am working in travel agency from 8AM - ...
^
Line 7, column 14, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... a bad-tempured boss. Unfortunately , we will be in high season because many ...
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Line 7, column 71, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'planned'.
Suggestion: planned
...high season because many of people have plan for trip on January .My boss said us to...
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Line 7, column 95, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
... of people have plan for trip on January .My boss said us to have work until 8PM a...
^^
Line 7, column 97, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: My
...f people have plan for trip on January .My boss said us to have work until 8PM and...
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Line 7, column 157, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ave work until 8PM and finished our work . It be impossible for me to leave my wor...
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Line 7, column 163, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'is'?
Suggestion: is
...rk until 8PM and finished our work . It be impossible for me to leave my work also...
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Line 10, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Nevertheless,
...can not find a good job very soon. Nevertheless I keen on learning piano and like to co...
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Line 12, column 53, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
... to know my situation and decided kindly . If it is possible I continue my lesson ...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, nevertheless, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.03092783505 0% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 32.9175257732 73% => OK
Preposition: 17.0 26.3917525773 64% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 612.0 937.175257732 65% => OK
No of words: 138.0 206.0 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.4347826087 4.54256449028 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.42743929552 3.78020617076 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46184935397 2.54303337028 97% => OK
Unique words: 94.0 127.690721649 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.68115942029 0.622605031667 109% => OK
syllable_count: 193.5 290.88556701 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 12.6804123711 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.9347363114 44.8134815571 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.5 76.5299724578 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.25 16.8248392259 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.875 4.34317383033 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 2.54639175258 432% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 7.41237113402 40% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.121535725741 0.216113520407 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0488338671912 0.0766984524023 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0428584405179 0.0603063233224 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.067486915513 0.12726935374 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0261389932899 0.0580467560999 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.1 8.37731958763 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 70.7449484536 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.12 8.71597938144 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.88 7.59969072165 91% => OK
difficult_words: 21.0 41.2886597938 51% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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