You have just rented an unfurnished flat and a friend has told you that the Opportunity Shop in the shopping center has cheap second-hand furniture.Write to the shop owner 1- Describe what you need2- Ask whether they have these items3- What items cost.You

Essay topics:

You have just rented an unfurnished flat and a friend has told you that the Opportunity Shop in the shopping center has cheap second-hand furniture.

Write to the shop owner

1- Describe what you need
2- Ask whether they have these items
3- What items cost.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to express my interest in some second-hand furniture to buy from your shop in the shopping center.

I have just rented an unfurnished flat where in the city center near to your shop, and I came to know from one of my friends that your shop sells a second-hand furniture. I was searching for a couch, four chairs and tea-table for my large living room. In addition to special appliances for the kitchen. There are several shops around, but I could not have chosen a better shop due to your prices.

The attached list contains all items which needed for my flat; however, the most urgent ones are highlighted in yellow for your advice if these are currently available at your shop. Recently, similar items were purchased from your shop to my neighbor when he shifted next-door flat.

I have your recent leaflet of this month. All prices are listed, but no indication for the second-hand furniture. I would therefore that you send me the cost of all highlighted items through the attached paper and consider two years warranty on the electric appliances.

I look forward to receiving your feedback.

Yours faithfully,

Ayoub

Votes
Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 147, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'second-hand furniture'.
Suggestion: second-hand furniture
... one of my friends that your shop sells a second-hand furniture. I was searching for a couch, four chai...
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Line 5, column 172, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...our shop sells a second-hand furniture. I was searching for a couch, four chairs ...
^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, look, second, so, therefore, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 32.9175257732 91% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 26.3917525773 83% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 978.0 937.175257732 104% => OK
No of words: 200.0 206.0 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89 4.54256449028 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76060309309 3.78020617076 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60238352285 2.54303337028 102% => OK
Unique words: 130.0 127.690721649 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.65 0.622605031667 104% => OK
syllable_count: 286.2 290.88556701 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.463917525773 647% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.1579797186 44.8134815571 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.5 76.5299724578 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6666666667 16.8248392259 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.83333333333 4.34317383033 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.26015244824 0.216113520407 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0869953550127 0.0766984524023 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0859453662468 0.0603063233224 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134127818279 0.12726935374 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0792760545693 0.0580467560999 137% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 8.37731958763 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 70.7449484536 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 7.45979381443 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 8.71597938144 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 7.59969072165 104% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 41.2886597938 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 8.62886597938 104% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.