You have recently read an article in the newspaper about someone you know personally. You found that some information is wrong.Write a letter to the editor to inform him about it. In your letter, write:•what the article is about•what the error is•wh

Essay topics:

You have recently read an article in the newspaper about someone you know personally. You found that some information is wrong.

Write a letter to the editor to inform him about it. In your letter, write:

• what the article is about

• what the error is

• what you expect the editor to do

Hi Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter in regards to the health article that is being published in your renowned newspaper every week. Last week, the article was related to the brain surgeons and their specialities in which the details of famous surgeon Dr.John was mentioned. Owing to the close relationship with him, I have noticed some errors in the information provided about him.

Firstly, he is specialised in medical sciences and has done a masters degree in neurology from the All India Medical Science Institute in Delhi, however, in the article, his academic qualification was wrongly described as MBBS degree from government college Amritsar. Secondly, the information related to his current work location was also incorrect, he is currently serving as a government servant in a local charitable hospital instead of Akash Neuro-hospital.

Considering the inaccuracies of the details, I request you to correct them as suggested otherwise this might create a hassle for the concerned public. Also, I urge you to publish the same article with corrected information in the next journal.

I will look forward to hearing from you.

Yours faithfully,

Prabhjot Kaur

Votes
Average: 8.1 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 26, Rule ID: IN_REGARD_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'regarding' or 'with regard to'.
Suggestion: regarding; with regard to
...or Madam, I am writing this letter in regards to the health article that is being publis...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 244, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: John
... which the details of famous surgeon Dr.John was mentioned. Owing to the close relat...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, look, second, secondly, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 32.9175257732 64% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 26.3917525773 102% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.85567010309 207% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1013.0 937.175257732 108% => OK
No of words: 188.0 206.0 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.38829787234 4.54256449028 119% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.70287850203 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94586742788 2.54303337028 116% => OK
Unique words: 128.0 127.690721649 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.68085106383 0.622605031667 109% => OK
syllable_count: 306.0 290.88556701 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 16.3608247423 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.1296866784 44.8134815571 154% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.555555556 76.5299724578 147% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8888888889 16.8248392259 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.77777777778 4.34317383033 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 7.41237113402 40% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229138908022 0.216113520407 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.088616158939 0.0766984524023 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0719125364907 0.0603063233224 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122327922537 0.12726935374 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0736684606628 0.0580467560999 127% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 8.37731958763 172% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 70.7449484536 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 7.45979381443 149% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.98 8.71597938144 160% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.58 7.59969072165 126% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 41.2886597938 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 8.62886597938 168% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 8.54432989691 117% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 81.4606741573 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.25 Out of 9
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