You have seen an advertisement in an English newspaper for a job working in the City Museum shop during the holidays.You decide to apply for the job.Write a letter to the director of the Museum. In your letter:•introduce yourself•explain what experien

Essay topics:

You have seen an advertisement in an English newspaper for a job working in the City Museum shop during the holidays.

You decide to apply for the job.

Write a letter to the director of the Museum. In your letter:

•introduce yourself

•explain what experience and special skills you have

•explain why you are interested in the job

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing this letter for applying for a position of shop manager at the City Museum which I came across and advert in The Times newspaper.

I am Dean Roberts from Ohio. I am now pursuing my graduation here at Oaksville University. My current field of study is in archaeological sciences. I am in 2nd year of my four-year course.

I have experience working at one of family shops for few years. I am outstanding at tracking shop inventory, managing accounts and maintaining store neat and tidy. Not only I am an apt salesman but also can capture and suggest valuables as per the needs of the customer.

The prospect of being working at shop excites me as it feels me with reminisce of family shop. In addition, working at museum would be beneficial for my course curriculum. Another intention of job is so that I can earn some extra income during summer break and pay tiny amount for my tuition fees.

I hope to hear from you soon.

Yours faithfully

Dean Roberts

Votes
Average: 6.4 (2 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 30, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...aper. I am Dean Roberts from Ohio. I am now pursuing my graduation here at O...
^
Line 13, column 65, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...g at one of family shops for few years. I am outstanding at tracking shop invento...
^
Line 13, column 203, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
.... Not only I am an apt salesman but also can capture and suggest valuables as per...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, so, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 32.9175257732 67% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 26.3917525773 91% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 840.0 937.175257732 90% => OK
No of words: 176.0 206.0 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77272727273 4.54256449028 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.64232057368 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72357111487 2.54303337028 107% => OK
Unique words: 118.0 127.690721649 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.670454545455 0.622605031667 108% => OK
syllable_count: 253.8 290.88556701 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 16.3608247423 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.6060481903 44.8134815571 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 64.6153846154 76.5299724578 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.5384615385 16.8248392259 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.0 4.34317383033 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210703446046 0.216113520407 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.062861341007 0.0766984524023 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0627343627988 0.0603063233224 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112287366272 0.12726935374 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.076025670856 0.0580467560999 131% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.8 8.37731958763 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.2 70.7449484536 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 7.45979381443 80% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.79 8.71597938144 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 7.59969072165 107% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 41.2886597938 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 8.62886597938 64% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 8.54432989691 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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