You have seen an advertisement for an evening class at a local music college You are interested in attending this class Write a letter to the teacher of the class Explain why you are interested in this music class Tell him her of your previous experience

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You have seen an advertisement for an evening class at a local music college. You are interested in attending this class. Write a letter to the teacher of the class
- Explain why you are interested in this music class
- Tell him/her of your previous experience in music
- Ask some questions about the class

Dear Sir,
I am writing to you because, I see advertisement for evening class at RT Music college. I am very much interest in the punjabi dol classes and want to attend your class.
I am happy to see dol class here in Brampton. I love music and when I play dol I get very happy. When I was a little boy, I like sound of dol. I see and I learn from my grandfather and my level is not perfect. So, I am interest in your class.
I come from Punjab, india. There I learn dol from my family since I am 8 years old. I also make Punjabi music for functions like wedding or birthday party. Everybody enjoy when I play dol.
The advertisement is saying evening classes 7-8pm but not mention on which days, is it possible I get the days for me to decide.
Please call me on 647-111-1111 or email information on chadda@outlook.com
Regards,
C. Singh

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 10, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Sir, I am writing to you because, I see adver...
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Line 3, column 47, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...appy to see dol class here in Brampton. I love music and when I play dol I get ve...
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Line 3, column 221, Rule ID: BE_INTEREST_IN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'interested'?
Suggestion: interested
...r and my level is not perfect. So, I am interest in your class. I come from Punjab, ind...
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Line 7, column 9, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ormation on chadda@outlook.com Regards, C. Singh
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, look, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 4.92783505155 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 32.9175257732 82% => OK
Preposition: 18.0 26.3917525773 68% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 688.0 937.175257732 73% => OK
No of words: 161.0 206.0 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.27329192547 4.54256449028 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.56210296601 3.78020617076 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73138014255 2.54303337028 107% => OK
Unique words: 94.0 127.690721649 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.583850931677 0.622605031667 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 209.7 290.88556701 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 16.3608247423 73% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.6893172292 44.8134815571 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 52.9230769231 76.5299724578 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 12.3846153846 16.8248392259 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.46153846154 4.34317383033 34% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.26191085237 0.216113520407 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0945595184046 0.0766984524023 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11535226495 0.0603063233224 191% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149125697411 0.12726935374 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.151471759228 0.0580467560999 261% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 4.9 8.37731958763 58% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 84.68 70.7449484536 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 4.4 7.45979381443 59% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 6.6 8.71597938144 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.39 7.59969072165 84% => OK
difficult_words: 22.0 41.2886597938 53% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 4.5 8.62886597938 52% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.8 8.54432989691 80% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 8.15463917526 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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