You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However,there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work.Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter describe the situati

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You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However,there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work.Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter describe the situation explain your problems and why it is difficult to work say what kind of accommodation you would prefer.

Dear Sir or Madam,
My name is Jasmine. I am writing this letter to inform you my difficulty living in the accommodation which you had allocate me.
Unfortunately, I am having terrible problem with my new roommate who just joined me. As she is very new, she doesn't know the rules and regulations of this accommodation yet, and that is causing me big issue in many ways.
Firstly, she has been inviting her country mates to sleep over and secondly they have been cooking their country food during the day. Therefore, it has been causing big crowd inside the room and especially at nighttime I could not concentrate on my studies. Perhaps you should be informed that I have reminded her both activities are not allowed.
I can not resist myself to request you to transfer me or her to another room. I would like to have room mate who is familiar with the rules of our accommodation better.
Thank you very much in advance.
Your faithfully,
Jasmine

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 116, Rule ID: HAD_VBP[1]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'allocated'.
Suggestion: allocated
...ving in the accommodation which you had allocate me. Unfortunately, I am having terribl...
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Line 2, column 116, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'allocated'.
Suggestion: allocated
...ving in the accommodation which you had allocate me. Unfortunately, I am having terribl...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 109, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...just joined me. As she is very new, she doesnt know the rules and regulations of this ...
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, second, secondly, therefore

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.48453608247 120% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 32.9175257732 106% => OK
Preposition: 19.0 26.3917525773 72% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 787.0 937.175257732 84% => OK
No of words: 168.0 206.0 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.68452380952 4.54256449028 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.60020574368 3.78020617076 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67514993116 2.54303337028 105% => OK
Unique words: 111.0 127.690721649 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.660714285714 0.622605031667 106% => OK
syllable_count: 244.8 290.88556701 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 16.3608247423 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.4920377222 44.8134815571 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 71.5454545455 76.5299724578 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2727272727 16.8248392259 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.27272727273 4.34317383033 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249081416525 0.216113520407 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.089658738861 0.0766984524023 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0855875929081 0.0603063233224 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151711893311 0.12726935374 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0673894339683 0.0580467560999 116% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.2 8.37731958763 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 70.7449484536 91% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 7.45979381443 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.27 8.71597938144 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 7.59969072165 101% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 41.2886597938 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 8.62886597938 99% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 8.54432989691 94% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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