You live in a room in college which you share with another student.However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find itvery difficult to work.Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letterdescribe the situatio

Essay topics:

You live in a room in college which you share with another student.
However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it
very difficult to work.

Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter

describe the situation

explain your problems and why it is difficult to work

say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

Dear sir,
I am a student of second year Master of Computer stream in the college S.K. Patel. I am writing to explain my situation towards my room mate.

I having my exam in next two 2 months. It is very important for me to pass it with a good score for further study. However, I can not concentrate on my study because of lots of disturbance in my room. Rahul, my room mate do the party on daily basis with his friends at the room. Drinks and smoking are common things in the party, as well as loud music also plays. Party runs for late night and lights still on till the party ends. I am having the issue to focus on my education. I could not find any solution by discussing the scenario.
I like to relocation of my room as soon as possible. I must prefer the room without sharing as I experienced very bad with sharing. If the room with single bedroom with basic facilities available, it is sufficient for me .
Hope you can understand the situation. Hoping for prompt reply of my latter with appropriate solution.

Yours Faithfully,
Kalpesh Sangani.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: .
...ities available, it is sufficient for me . Hope you can understand the situation....
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, second, so, still, well, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.48453608247 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 5.05154639175 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.03092783505 0% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 32.9175257732 79% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 26.3917525773 110% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.85567010309 182% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 870.0 937.175257732 93% => OK
No of words: 195.0 206.0 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.46153846154 4.54256449028 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.73687570622 3.78020617076 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5384793777 2.54303337028 100% => OK
Unique words: 125.0 127.690721649 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.641025641026 0.622605031667 103% => OK
syllable_count: 266.4 290.88556701 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.13402061856 131% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 12.6804123711 126% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 16.3608247423 73% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 18.6262583468 44.8134815571 42% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 54.375 76.5299724578 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 12.1875 16.8248392259 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.375 4.34317383033 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167183609265 0.216113520407 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.052700621738 0.0766984524023 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0453122702843 0.0603063233224 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103276226637 0.12726935374 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0378081022802 0.0580467560999 65% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 5.7 8.37731958763 68% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 76.22 70.7449484536 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.6 7.45979381443 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.7 8.71597938144 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.47 7.59969072165 98% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 41.2886597938 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 8.62886597938 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 6.8 8.54432989691 80% => OK
text_standard: 6.0 8.15463917526 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.2247191011 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.25 Out of 9
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