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You recently noticed a local restaurant that was offering a part-time job.Write a letter to the restaurant's manager. In your letter,. explain that you would like to apply for the job. give some details of any relevant experience that you have. specify th

Essay topics: You recently noticed a local restaurant that was offering a part-time job.

Write a letter to the restaurant's manager. In your letter,

. explain that you would like to apply for the job
. give some details of any relevant experience that you have
. specify the days and times that would suit you

FaizalReza's picture

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter to let you know that I would like to apply for a part-time job as a Relationship Manager at your local restaurant. First of all, I got to know about this wonderful opportunity from one of my friend's who work as a full-time chef in your restaurant.

Secondly, I have worked in the past at some of the big giant companies like KFC and McDonald's as a Relationship Manager. I used to handle customer's queries and complaints and on top of that I gave a one-time weekly presentation on number of cases resolved in a week to team management. In addition to this, I was also responsible for providing insights on ROI on the investment made by the owner.

Thirdly, I would be grateful to you if you can allow me to work from Monday to Friday between 9 am to 5 pm excluding public holidays.

I look forward to hearing back from you soon.

Your's Faithfully,
FaizalReza

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 40, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
... Secondly, I have worked in the past at some of the big giant companies like KFC and McDona...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, look, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, in addition, you know, first of all, on top of that

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.48453608247 27% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 32.9175257732 70% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 26.3917525773 125% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 755.0 937.175257732 81% => OK
No of words: 167.0 206.0 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.52095808383 4.54256449028 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.59483629437 3.78020617076 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87174291726 2.54303337028 113% => OK
Unique words: 110.0 127.690721649 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.658682634731 0.622605031667 106% => OK
syllable_count: 231.3 290.88556701 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.360824742268 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 12.6804123711 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 16.3608247423 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 46.6255026783 44.8134815571 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.375 76.5299724578 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.875 16.8248392259 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 14.0 4.34317383033 322% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25802580057 0.216113520407 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0958753803988 0.0766984524023 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0884930054952 0.0603063233224 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134479701294 0.12726935374 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0591511862442 0.0580467560999 102% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 8.37731958763 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 70.7449484536 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 7.45979381443 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.94 8.71597938144 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 7.59969072165 103% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 41.2886597938 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 8.62886597938 156% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 8.54432989691 117% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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