You should spend about 20 minutes on this task You have lost your student identification card This has created some problems for you Write a letter to the director of student services In your letter advise them of your situation explain how this is affect

Essay topics:

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

You have lost your student identification card. This has created some problems for you.

Write a letter to the director of student services. In your letter

advise them of your situation
explain how this is affecting you
request a new card
You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows:

Dear

You should write at least 150 words

Dear Sir / Madam,
I am writing to bring to your notice that, I have lost my student identity card while returning back to home yesterday late evening. this is resulting to no entry to college campus since I could not show a valid pupil identification at the gate.

I was known to many people in the premises,However, due to strict administration and security policies I have been denied to access to attend classes, IT laboratory and library facilities. Eventually, my scheduled courses and revisions are missed to a great extent and resulting to poor performance in examination.Therefore, ID becomes a mandatory to hold on daily use inside academic premise.

I urge to consider this as special request and issue me a new student card, so that I can be part of in my regular subjects without fail. If re-issuing requires an additional fee, then the I shall pay the same at the administration officer with immediate effect.

I look forward to hearing from you with a positive approval for me to proceed further.

Yours Sincerely,
Ganesh Prakasam

Votes
Average: 7.8 (2 votes)
Essay Categories
IELTS Writing Task I - IELTS General Training

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 87, Rule ID: RETURN_BACK[1]
Message: Use simply 'returning'.
Suggestion: returning
...ave lost my student identity card while returning back to home yesterday late evening. this is...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 134, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...ng back to home yesterday late evening. this is resulting to no entry to college cam...
^^^^
Line 4, column 43, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , However
...was known to many people in the premises,However, due to strict administration and secur...
^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 315, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Therefore
...ting to poor performance in examination.Therefore, ID becomes a mandatory to hold on dail...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 8, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'considering'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'urge' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: considering
...use inside academic premise. I urge to consider this as special request and issue me a ...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 186, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'I'?
Suggestion: the; I
...ssuing requires an additional fee, then the I shall pay the same at the administratio...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, look, so, then, therefore, while, to a great extent

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 32.9175257732 67% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 26.3917525773 106% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 883.0 937.175257732 94% => OK
No of words: 177.0 206.0 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98870056497 4.54256449028 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.64748333727 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.26102666537 2.54303337028 128% => OK
Unique words: 132.0 127.690721649 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.745762711864 0.622605031667 120% => OK
syllable_count: 288.9 290.88556701 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 12.6804123711 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 16.3608247423 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 51.2736226046 44.8134815571 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.375 76.5299724578 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.125 16.8248392259 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 4.34317383033 184% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 2.54639175258 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18029777096 0.216113520407 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0670713529671 0.0766984524023 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0521649475 0.0603063233224 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0870332827068 0.12726935374 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0618220605308 0.0580467560999 107% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 8.37731958763 156% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 70.7449484536 69% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 7.45979381443 160% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 8.71597938144 134% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 7.59969072165 119% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 41.2886597938 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 8.62886597938 174% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 8.54432989691 126% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 8.15463917526 147% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 87, Rule ID: RETURN_BACK[1]
Message: Use simply 'returning'.
Suggestion: returning
...ave lost my student identity card while returning back to home yesterday late evening. this is...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 134, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...ng back to home yesterday late evening. this is resulting to no entry to college cam...
^^^^
Line 4, column 43, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , However
...was known to many people in the premises,However, due to strict administration and secur...
^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 315, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Therefore
...ting to poor performance in examination.Therefore, ID becomes a mandatory to hold on dail...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 8, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'considering'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'urge' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: considering
...use inside academic premise. I urge to consider this as special request and issue me a ...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 186, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'I'?
Suggestion: the; I
...ssuing requires an additional fee, then the I shall pay the same at the administratio...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, look, so, then, therefore, while, to a great extent

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 32.9175257732 67% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 26.3917525773 106% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 883.0 937.175257732 94% => OK
No of words: 177.0 206.0 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98870056497 4.54256449028 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.64748333727 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.26102666537 2.54303337028 128% => OK
Unique words: 132.0 127.690721649 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.745762711864 0.622605031667 120% => OK
syllable_count: 288.9 290.88556701 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 12.6804123711 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 16.3608247423 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 51.2736226046 44.8134815571 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.375 76.5299724578 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.125 16.8248392259 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 4.34317383033 184% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 2.54639175258 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18029777096 0.216113520407 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0670713529671 0.0766984524023 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0521649475 0.0603063233224 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0870332827068 0.12726935374 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0618220605308 0.0580467560999 107% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 8.37731958763 156% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 70.7449484536 69% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 7.45979381443 160% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 8.71597938144 134% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 7.59969072165 119% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 41.2886597938 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 8.62886597938 174% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 8.54432989691 126% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 8.15463917526 147% => OK
What are above readability scores?

---------------------
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.