A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
It has become a debatable topic about the exploitation of animals by mankind. Some people believed that animals should not be exploited and should be treated fairly by human beings. In contrast, others think animals should be utilised to assist humans in various kinds of ways, such as the source of food or for medical testing. The following essay will discuss both views in details, but in my opinion, I believe that animals can be used as the source of food or to assist human beings in the proportionate way and human should treat them properly.
On the one hand, a group of people believe that mankind does not have the rights to exploit animals, as they are also living creatures. It is true that animals live by following their instinct, but they have the same feeling as human beings, therefore it would not be fair for mankind to exploit them. In several cases, it has been reported that some of the cows had cried before they were slaughtered in the slaughterhouse, which means that they also had the same feeling as human beings. In another reported cases, some of the animals was treated poorly by their masters, though they had been exploited heavily and made them sick or injured.
On the other hand, it is undeniable that mankind needs the assistant of animals in various kinds of ways. Firstly, some animals are needed by humans to assist them in producing and providing foods. In many countries, cows, buffalos or horses are used by farmers to cultivate their farming areas, and some dairy farms animals such as chicken and sheep are slaughtered for their meats. Without the existence of these animals, there would be a humanity issue about the lack of food supplies and starvation for mankind. Secondly, some animals are used in certain scientific experiments or medical testing for the sake of humanity. Several new drugs are being tested in some mice or monkeys before they are being tested on human beings. Although it might seem as an inhuman act, but these experiments have saved thousands of human lives.
In conclusion, people have different opinions about the exploitation of animals. Some people agree with the statement but others disagree with it. In my opinion, I think the employment or the usage of animals to help human beings is not a problem, as long as we exploit them in a proportionate way. For example, as many farmers use dogs as their assistant in their field and the dogs should be treated and fed properly.
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Suggestion: some
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...uman beings. In another reported cases, some of the animals was treated poorly by their mas...
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Message: Consider replacing "in a proportionate way" with adverb for "proportionate"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...t a problem, as long as we exploit them in a proportionate way. For example, as many farmers use dogs ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, i think, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, in my opinion, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 13.1623246493 175% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 10.4138276553 192% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 24.0651302605 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 41.998997996 133% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2035.0 1615.20841683 126% => OK
No of words: 424.0 315.596192385 134% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79952830189 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48619251324 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.448113207547 0.561755894193 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 630.0 506.74238477 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.5509152955 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.105263158 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3157894737 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.78947368421 7.06120827912 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.454614507149 0.244688304435 186% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.151406055966 0.084324248473 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0730492336955 0.0667982634062 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.297217736532 0.151304729494 196% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0541544820117 0.056905535591 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.0946893788 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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