You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.You have seen an advertisement in an English newspaper for a job working in the City Museum shop during the holidays. You decide to apply for the job.Write a letter to the director of the Museum. In your lett

Essay topics:

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

You have seen an advertisement in an English newspaper for a job working in the City Museum shop during the holidays. You decide to apply for the job.

Write a letter to the director of the Museum. In your letter,

•introduce yourself

•explain what experience and special skills you have

•explain why you are interested in the job

Write at least 150 words.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to apply for the job you have posted on English Newspaper.

I am lisa and I am an junior at Economic University and my major is marketing. I want to have a part time job to reduce my family’s finance burden. I am into study about history and ancient things so when I see the job, i am really feel excitied so I hope my application will be accepted. I had 1 year experience working for a clothes shop as a seller. In addition, I can speak fluently Spanish so I think it is my advantage when you have foreign visitors. I will send you my application tomorrow and hope that you will take it into account.

I am looking forward to hearing from you.

lisa

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 10, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Sir, I am writing this letter to apply for th...
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Line 5, column 20, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...nglish Newspaper. I am lisa and I am an junior at Economic University and my ma...
^^
Line 5, column 80, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...c University and my major is marketing. I want to have a part time job to reduce ...
^
Line 5, column 97, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...my major is marketing. I want to have a part time job to reduce my family's finance ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 154, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...reduce my family's finance burden. I am into study about history and ancient...
^
Line 5, column 226, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...d ancient things so when I see the job, i am really feel excitied so I hope my ap...
^
Line 5, column 238, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'felt'.
Suggestion: felt
...ings so when I see the job, i am really feel excitied so I hope my application will ...
^^^^
Line 5, column 295, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...I hope my application will be accepted. I had 1 year experience working for a clo...
^
Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Lisa
...looking forward to hearing from you. lisa
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
look, really, so, i think, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.48453608247 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 32.9175257732 82% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 26.3917525773 42% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 570.0 937.175257732 61% => OK
No of words: 133.0 206.0 65% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.28571428571 4.54256449028 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.39596269041 3.78020617076 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65429508135 2.54303337028 104% => OK
Unique words: 85.0 127.690721649 67% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.639097744361 0.622605031667 103% => OK
syllable_count: 186.3 290.88556701 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 12.6804123711 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.576031259 44.8134815571 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 71.25 76.5299724578 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.625 16.8248392259 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.75 4.34317383033 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 2.54639175258 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 7.41237113402 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238504409365 0.216113520407 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110857561339 0.0766984524023 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0803341690861 0.0603063233224 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.201850022199 0.12726935374 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105805706961 0.0580467560999 182% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.1 8.37731958763 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 70.7449484536 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 7.45979381443 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.31 8.71597938144 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 7.59969072165 99% => OK
difficult_words: 26.0 41.2886597938 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 150 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.