You went to a museum with your elderly friend last week. However, he/she found it difficult to walk around the museum. Write a letter to the manager and say :whom did you visit the museum with?what problems/inconveniences did he/she face?also, suggest sol

Dear Sir,

I am writing due to our visiting the national museum and the problems which we faced with.

Last Wednesday my old friend, who was from another country, and I decided to see the national museum which is so well known in the whole world and every body is eager to visit that. So, my friend and I could not wait anymore to see this museum from near.

To tell the truth, it was as much as perfect that we were told but we faced with some remarkable issues that must not be neglected. First and foremost is related to facilities. The thing that I am trying to say is about lack of elevator. Since, it is an international museum and different people from youngsters to elderly come and visit, must be equipped with convenience equipment. The other significant negative point was about your guidance. As a matter of fact, there was no body to explain items in an easy way for elderly people in order to understand everything easily.So, it seems like a good idea to consider these items for being better and better day by day.

At last, I appreciate all your trying and looking forward to hearing from you.

Yours sincerely,

FATEMEH BAGHERI

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 10, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Sir, I am writing due to our visiting the nat...
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Line 7, column 478, Rule ID: ANY_BODY[2]
Message: Did you mean 'nobody'?
Suggestion: nobody
...uidance. As a matter of fact, there was no body to explain items in an easy way for eld...
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Line 7, column 503, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an easy way" with adverb for "easy"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...act, there was no body to explain items in an easy way for elderly people in order to understa...
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Line 7, column 578, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: So
...n order to understand everything easily.So, it seems like a good idea to consider ...
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Line 9, column 27, Rule ID: YOUR[1]
Message: Did you mean 'you're' or 'you are'?
Suggestion: you're; you are
...ay by day. At last, I appreciate all your trying and looking forward to hearing f...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, so, well, as a matter of fact, to tell the truth

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 7.48453608247 174% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 5.05154639175 198% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.03092783505 231% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 24.0 32.9175257732 73% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 26.3917525773 114% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 956.0 937.175257732 102% => OK
No of words: 207.0 206.0 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.61835748792 4.54256449028 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.79308509922 3.78020617076 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45121363244 2.54303337028 96% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 127.690721649 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.642512077295 0.622605031667 103% => OK
syllable_count: 293.4 290.88556701 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.6648911334 44.8134815571 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.9090909091 76.5299724578 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8181818182 16.8248392259 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.36363636364 4.34317383033 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 2.54639175258 196% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195788067762 0.216113520407 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.069989815024 0.0766984524023 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0585482001789 0.0603063233224 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131488678719 0.12726935374 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0556526332262 0.0580467560999 96% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 8.37731958763 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 70.7449484536 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 7.45979381443 106% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 8.71597938144 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.12 7.59969072165 94% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 41.2886597938 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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