You were hurt in a minor accident in a supermarket, and you wish to complain to the supermarket,Write a letter to the manager of the supermarket. In your letter- Say who you are- Give details about the accident- Suggest how the supermarket could prevent s

Essay topics:

You were hurt in a minor accident in a supermarket, and you wish to complain to the supermarket,

Write a letter to the manager of the supermarket. In your letter

- Say who you are
- Give details about the accident
- Suggest how the supermarket could prevent similar accidents.

Dear Manager,

I am writing this letter to register a complaint about a minor accident that I had in Jinnah supermarket yesterday evening while I was walking in the market with my friends.

I am Ali Jawad, residing in Islamabad for years and I come to Jinnah market every now and then. Hence, I am a regular visitor to the market for more than 3 years. If you remember, we even met twice earlier in the market when I gave some suggestions to improve the environment of it.

Anyway, about the incident, I tripped on a pothole while I was walking in the market yesterday evening. To be more precise about the details, it was dark and there were no street lights on the road passing through the market; hence, I could not see the pothole on the road. As such, I stumbled, lost my footing and fell on the road; however, I did not sustain any major injury, thankfully. Later, I was taken to the hospital by the passers-by to get minor medical care.

To avoid such incidents in the future, I suggest you to fill the pots on all roads in the market and install street lights so that people can see clearly while walking on the roads. Please let me know if any kind of my support is needed in this regard.

I hope the required action will be taken as soon as possible to eliminate the imminent danger of such incidents.

Yours faithfully,
Ali Jawad

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 77, Rule ID: EVERY_NOW_AND_THEN[1]
Message: Use simply 'now and then'.
Suggestion: now and then
...d for years and I come to Jinnah market every now and then. Hence, I am a regular visitor to the m...
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Line 13, column 18, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... of such incidents. Yours faithfully, Ali Jawad
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
anyway, hence, however, if, so, then, while, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 32.9175257732 88% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 26.3917525773 129% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1114.0 937.175257732 119% => OK
No of words: 249.0 206.0 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.47389558233 4.54256449028 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97237131171 3.78020617076 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44084214146 2.54303337028 96% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 127.690721649 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.586345381526 0.622605031667 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 350.1 290.88556701 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.13402061856 142% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 16.3608247423 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 46.8674253139 44.8134815571 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.8333333333 76.5299724578 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.75 16.8248392259 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.33333333333 4.34317383033 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.128527273934 0.216113520407 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0385910011816 0.0766984524023 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0511838054915 0.0603063233224 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0669629090695 0.12726935374 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0656672409174 0.0580467560999 113% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 8.37731958763 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 70.7449484536 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 7.45979381443 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.65 8.71597938144 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 7.59969072165 103% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 41.2886597938 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 8.54432989691 117% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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