You work for a company and need some time off work

Essay topics:

You work for a company and need some time off work

Dear Mr Harry,

I am writing to you about the possibility of taking 12 days off work in order to complete my thesis and final exams for my Master’s degree in Finance from the University of Manchester. I am hoping that you would grant me leave from 17th July to 28th July 2019.

I have almost finished my thesis, which I must submit to my teacher by July 24th. I need some time to completely finish it and to prepare for the upcoming exams. Hence I am asking for your permission to take time off work.

I can assure you that I would check my emails daily, perhaps reply to some of them and be available for emergency phone calls from the office. Once I complete my exams and get back to the office, I would endeavour to come into the office earlier than usual and work Sundays in order to catch up on anything I had missed. I have already talked to Ethan and he is ready to share some of the responsibilities during my absence.

I realise my temporary absence could be an inconvenience to you and the rest of the team, but I really need to take the leave to complete my Master’s degree qualification.

I am looking forward to hearing from you and expecting your kind cooperation.

Yours sincerely,

Susanne Dvorak

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ve from 17th July to 28th July 2019. I have almost finished my thesis, which I...
^
Line 5, column 83, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...must submit to my teacher by July 24th. I need some time to completely finish it ...
^
Line 5, column 163, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
... and to prepare for the upcoming exams. Hence I am asking for your permission to take...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 378, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...alked to Ethan and he is ready to share some of the responsibilities during my absence. ...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 11, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... Master's degree qualification. I am looking forward to hearing from you ...
^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, if, look, really, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.48453608247 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 4.92783505155 162% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 5.05154639175 178% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 32.9175257732 115% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 26.3917525773 140% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1019.0 937.175257732 109% => OK
No of words: 225.0 206.0 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.52888888889 4.54256449028 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.87298334621 3.78020617076 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69006035088 2.54303337028 106% => OK
Unique words: 130.0 127.690721649 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.577777777778 0.622605031667 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 326.7 290.88556701 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 16.3608247423 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 53.69857717 44.8134815571 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.6363636364 76.5299724578 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4545454545 16.8248392259 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.90909090909 4.34317383033 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 2.54639175258 196% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.272073881278 0.216113520407 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104096783924 0.0766984524023 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100350114256 0.0603063233224 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146539159951 0.12726935374 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0919607439509 0.0580467560999 158% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 8.37731958763 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 70.7449484536 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 7.45979381443 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.99 8.71597938144 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 7.59969072165 104% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 41.2886597938 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 8.54432989691 117% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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