You work in a company and recently there has been a computer problem in your office. Write a letter to your manager:-Introduce yourself-Describe the problem-Ask him to take immediate measures in this regard

Essay topics:

You work in a company and recently there has been a computer problem in your office. Write a letter to your manager:

-Introduce yourself

-Describe the problem

-Ask him to take immediate measures in this regard

Dear Sir,

My name in Kevin baker, employee id 2234567 current working for the global business department as a sales representative. The intend of writing this letter is to describe a recent problem with my laptop.

To elucidate, the mac book serial number “XDGF4567” was allocated to me last year by the company for work has recently been giving some technical problems which are affecting my daily work. Firstly the laptop has no battery backup even after a full charge so makes my life miserable while I am on business travel abroad. Additionally the laptop intermittently shuts down in the middle of the work leading to the loss of critical data which is directly effecting the business transactions with the customers.

Hence I would request you to provide a replacement of the laptop immediately so that I can carry out my work more efficiently.

I look forward to your immediate response on this matter.

Yours sincerely

Kevin Baker

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 10, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Sir, My name in Kevin baker, employee id 2234...
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Line 3, column 123, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...s department as a sales representative. The intend of writing this letter is to describe a...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 205, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...scribe a recent problem with my laptop. To elucidate, the mac book serial number...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 332, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Additionally,
...e while I am on business travel abroad. Additionally the laptop intermittently shuts down in...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 11, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...s transactions with the customers. Hence I would request you to provide a replac...
^^^^^
Line 19, column 12, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... matter. Yours sincerely Kevin Baker
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, hence, if, look, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 0.0 5.05154639175 0% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 32.9175257732 49% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 26.3917525773 76% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 817.0 937.175257732 87% => OK
No of words: 158.0 206.0 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17088607595 4.54256449028 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.54539209256 3.78020617076 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05947691191 2.54303337028 120% => OK
Unique words: 113.0 127.690721649 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.715189873418 0.622605031667 115% => OK
syllable_count: 250.2 290.88556701 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.13402061856 33% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 12.6804123711 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.5197037096 44.8134815571 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.125 76.5299724578 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.75 16.8248392259 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.25 4.34317383033 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 2.54639175258 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 7.41237113402 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21895190727 0.216113520407 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102082072473 0.0766984524023 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0863768048698 0.0603063233224 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129936541305 0.12726935374 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0436164573855 0.0580467560999 75% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 8.37731958763 153% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 70.7449484536 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 7.45979381443 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 8.71597938144 146% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.18 7.59969072165 121% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 41.2886597938 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 8.62886597938 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 8.15463917526 159% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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