You work for an international company and you would like to attend a training. Wirte to you manager

Essay topics:

You work for an international company and you would like to attend a training. Wirte to you manager

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to inform you about my intentions to attend a training that I found useful in the weekly newspaper. The training is 'Website designing using JAVA Technologies'. It is designed for all Web Designers and Administrators.

The is tailored to the needs of 21st century Website Designers and Web Database Administrators and it will take place at Sheraton Hotel and Gardens for 4 days. The starting on the 25th June to 28th June, between 10am and 4pm daily.

I am soliciting for the company's approval to attend the training and any financial assistance towards it. I need to register early for the course to secure a place and I do no have enough fund to pay for it, I am hoping the company can help with the payment so as not to miss this golden opportunity.

Needless to say, the course is if enormous advantage to the company as well because it will save us a huge amount of money spent on maintenance of SAP software. I can also arrange an in-house-training for my colleagues to share the acquired knowledge and this is also an added bonus.

Thanks for your usual help.

Yours sincerely,

Janet Johnson.

Votes
Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 4, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...Web Designers and Administrators. The is tailored to the needs of 21st century...
^^
Line 5, column 205, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... starting on the 25th June to 28th June, between 10am and 4pm daily. I am sol...
^^
Line 9, column 272, Rule ID: ADDED_BONUS[1]
Message: This phrase might be redundant. Use simply 'bonus'.
Suggestion: bonus
... acquired knowledge and this is also an added bonus. Thanks for your usual help. Your...
^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, well

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 5.05154639175 178% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 32.9175257732 64% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 26.3917525773 87% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 951.0 937.175257732 101% => OK
No of words: 202.0 206.0 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70792079208 4.54256449028 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76996954942 3.78020617076 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85761939883 2.54303337028 112% => OK
Unique words: 130.0 127.690721649 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.643564356436 0.622605031667 103% => OK
syllable_count: 297.9 290.88556701 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 4.0 0.824742268041 485% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.7891506465 44.8134815571 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.4545454545 76.5299724578 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3636363636 16.8248392259 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.63636363636 4.34317383033 38% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158559411075 0.216113520407 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.049330491178 0.0766984524023 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.04316215347 0.0603063233224 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0749398836416 0.12726935374 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0342401145094 0.0580467560999 59% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 8.37731958763 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 70.7449484536 87% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 7.45979381443 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 8.71597938144 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 7.59969072165 108% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 41.2886597938 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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