You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job.Write a letter to your manager. In your letter:describe the training courseexplain what the company could do to help yousay how t

Dear Mr. Godfrey,

I would like to inform you about a course I am interested in.

Recently, there was an advertisement in the Times magazines for a seminar in Business Analysis holding in the United States of America. As the head of the business unit as well as a business analyst, the training will be of immense value to me and the company as a whole. Being a certified Business Analyst, the course will help boost my PDU (Professional Development Units). Moreover, as an analyst, I need to keep abreast of the trends in business. Consequently, the seminar will help boost my career. As the annual appraisal exercise will be coming up shortly, a knowledge and certification in the course will aid my next promotion. With the certification, the corporate image of the company will also get a high rating compared to her contemporaries. Part of the course content is management style and lately, there has been an ongoing initiative on people's management, which in my opinion will be an insight into management.

Since the training will also be of benefit to the company, I was hoping you could recommend me for the training. However, I have been scheduled for 5 trainings by the human resource department, but, am willing to replace one of it with this particular one.

Thank you as I look forward to a favourable response.

Yours sincerely,
Beloved Mimi.

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)
Essays by the user:

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, however, if, look, moreover, so, well, as well as, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.48453608247 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 4.92783505155 223% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 32.9175257732 58% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 26.3917525773 117% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 3.85567010309 233% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1141.0 937.175257732 122% => OK
No of words: 233.0 206.0 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89699570815 4.54256449028 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.90696013833 3.78020617076 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9706082295 2.54303337028 117% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 127.690721649 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.587982832618 0.622605031667 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 367.2 290.88556701 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.13402061856 55% => OK
Article: 5.0 0.824742268041 606% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 1.83505154639 218% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.5251036232 44.8134815571 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.7692307692 76.5299724578 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9230769231 16.8248392259 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.84615384615 4.34317383033 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 2.54639175258 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.301986945939 0.216113520407 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0939807551263 0.0766984524023 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0505591661529 0.0603063233224 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139163726736 0.12726935374 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0755517742325 0.0580467560999 130% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 8.37731958763 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 70.7449484536 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 7.45979381443 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.84 8.71597938144 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.09 7.59969072165 120% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 41.2886597938 165% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 8.62886597938 99% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.