You would like to buy some electrical goods at a shop in a nearby town. Write a letter to the shop and ask if they have the things you want or whether they will be able to order them. Ask what the prices are and how long they will be able to hold the good

Essay topics:

You would like to buy some electrical goods at a shop in a nearby town.

Write a letter to the shop and ask if they have the things you want or whether they will be able to order them. Ask what the prices are and how long they will be able to hold the goods for you.

You do NOT need to write any addresses

Dear Sir,
I am planning to buy a digital camera and computer tablet and writing this letter to enquire about the availability of these items at your shop.
I intend to procure digital camera for my personal use as I am going for vacation in India. The camera should be of reputed brands such as Canon, Sony and must be minimum 16 pixels. Besides, features like automatic scene choice, wifi connectivity is also required. It need not be a DSLR high zoom camera but optical zoom of more than 5 would be useable as it helps to take picture from distance. In addition, computer tablet of Samsung make is in my buy list for my daughter who would use this for watching online courses and bit of entertainment purpose like listening songs, watching you tube videos.
First of all, I would like to know the prices of these items because budget is my primary concern and it would be good if you mention the cost with and without taxes as local government keeps on altering the tax structure. Furthermore, how long would be able to hold these items for me after depositing the booking amount? It any of the items are not in your inventory, can it be ordered and what would be lead time to make it available.
I am looking forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours faithfully,
PADMA

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Sir, I am planning to buy a digital camera an...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, furthermore, if, look, so, in addition, such as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 7.48453608247 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 4.92783505155 203% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 32.9175257732 82% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 26.3917525773 117% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1052.0 937.175257732 112% => OK
No of words: 231.0 206.0 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.55411255411 4.54256449028 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.89854898053 3.78020617076 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46332138581 2.54303337028 97% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 127.690721649 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.614718614719 0.622605031667 99% => OK
syllable_count: 337.5 290.88556701 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 16.3608247423 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.6806930587 44.8134815571 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.6363636364 76.5299724578 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 16.8248392259 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 4.34317383033 184% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21674883322 0.216113520407 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0743308780572 0.0766984524023 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.052421903563 0.0603063233224 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119324680389 0.12726935374 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.062630241412 0.0580467560999 108% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 8.37731958763 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 70.7449484536 83% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 7.45979381443 138% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.11 8.71597938144 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 7.59969072165 109% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 41.2886597938 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 8.54432989691 122% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.