You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost.

Essay topics:

You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost.

Dear Sir,
I am writing in reference to inquire about a seminar "optimization for satellite networks" published in Australian Daily last week.

To elucidate I presently work for a satellite operator, therefore, I am keen to attend the seminar. The seminar will not only provide valuable information about network optimization but experts from the industry will share upcoming trends on both ground segment as well as the space segment. Although I have attended a few technology seminars in Singapore, however, this seminar will provide certification on some link budget tools which will further help to reduce the operational cost on live networks. For your information, the advert published in the newspaper was not clear and did not provide complete information.

Since I would be coming from India, therefore, I would need clear information regarding the dates, accommodation and cost of the program. This information will help me take prior approvals from the company management and make advance bookings for flights and hotel.
I look forward to your response.
Yours sincerely
Saad

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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Dear Sir, I am writing in reference to inquire abo...
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...ublished in Australian Daily last week. To elucidate I presently work for a sate...
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... upcoming trends on both ground segment as well as the space segment. Although I have atte...
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...advance bookings for flights and hotel. I look forward to your response. Your...
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.... I look forward to your response. Yours sincerely Saad
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...ard to your response. Yours sincerely Saad
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...your response. Yours sincerely Saad
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, look, regarding, so, therefore, well, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.48453608247 27% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 4.92783505155 162% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 32.9175257732 39% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 26.3917525773 76% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 3.85567010309 363% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 938.0 937.175257732 100% => OK
No of words: 171.0 206.0 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.48538011696 4.54256449028 121% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.61617157096 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.1182808823 2.54303337028 123% => OK
Unique words: 113.0 127.690721649 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.66081871345 0.622605031667 106% => OK
syllable_count: 294.3 290.88556701 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.41237113402 120% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.3129697577 44.8134815571 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.222222222 76.5299724578 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 16.8248392259 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.33333333333 4.34317383033 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 2.54639175258 275% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223707697786 0.216113520407 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0804377034199 0.0766984524023 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0722615268605 0.0603063233224 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110753122327 0.12726935374 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0717141907658 0.0580467560999 124% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 8.37731958763 166% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 70.7449484536 62% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 7.45979381443 160% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.56 8.71597938144 167% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.2 7.59969072165 121% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 41.2886597938 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 8.62886597938 174% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 8.15463917526 184% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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