You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost.Write at least 150 words.You do NOT nee

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You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost.

Write at least 150 words.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to seek your permission for participating in a seminar on “Customer services and marketing” in the US. I would like to enquire about the detailed information related to dates, cost, accommodation, and programme.

I would like to know the exact duration of the seminar along with the dates. It will be really great if you can notify me on the topics and speakers of the program. Since I will be travelling from India, knowing the accommodation and the cost will be supportable to make the better travel arrangements. Would the hotel bookings be arranged by you? If not, could you please let me know about the hotels nearby with the profitable cost per night including meals?

I am very keen on attending the conference as it will not only help me gaining in-depth knowledge, required skills and expertise on marketing trends and strategies on providing high quality of consumer services, but also, I shall be able to contribute with my full potential in the company’s growth and enhancement.

I hope you will give me the opportunity to take part in the conference, and strengthen my understanding, moreover, broaden my experience which will in turn lead to future success in my career as well as generating the long-term profits and sustainable growth of the organisation.

Yours faithfully,

Prabhpreet Kaur

Votes
Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 2, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... cost, accommodation, and programme. I would like to know the exact duration o...
^
Line 5, column 463, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...fitable cost per night including meals? I am very keen on attending the conferen...
^^^^
Line 7, column 72, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[9]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to gain' or 'gain'.
Suggestion: to gain; gain
... conference as it will not only help me gaining in-depth knowledge, required skills and...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, really, so, then, well, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 4.92783505155 244% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 5.05154639175 198% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 32.9175257732 76% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 26.3917525773 129% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.85567010309 207% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1152.0 937.175257732 123% => OK
No of words: 225.0 206.0 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12 4.54256449028 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.87298334621 3.78020617076 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.17976938367 2.54303337028 125% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 127.690721649 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.631111111111 0.622605031667 101% => OK
syllable_count: 349.2 290.88556701 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.463917525773 647% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 16.3608247423 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 89.7129310635 44.8134815571 200% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 115.2 76.5299724578 151% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5 16.8248392259 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.9 4.34317383033 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192141113929 0.216113520407 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0865486053898 0.0766984524023 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0718363563517 0.0603063233224 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112455789972 0.12726935374 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105045438887 0.0580467560999 181% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 8.37731958763 166% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 70.7449484536 69% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 7.45979381443 160% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 8.71597938144 146% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.36 7.59969072165 123% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 41.2886597938 160% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 8.62886597938 99% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 8.54432989691 126% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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