Your child is going on a three day school trip to another country. The head teacher wants to find parents to go with the group and you would like to go.Write a letter to the head teacher. In your letter:Say why you would like to go on the tripSuggest what

Essay topics:

Your child is going on a three day school trip to another country. The head teacher wants to find parents to go with the group and you would like to go.

Write a letter to the head teacher. In your letter:

Say why you would like to go on the trip
Suggest what you could do to help during the trip
Ask other questions about the trip

Dear Mam,

I am writing to you regarding the international tour that the school has planned for the children. It came to my knowledge that you are searching for volanteeers who are willing to go along and can be of some help. I am elated to inform you that I am interested to join you on in this trip.

I have shown my eagerness because until now, I have gone out with my spouse only. I am extremely excited this time as there will be many students and it will be a completely different experience with full of energy and enthusiasm. Moreover, I have already visited the UK which will be an extra advantage for everyone. I would like to let you know that I can assisst you in documentation work like getting visas and arranging boarding pass. Also, as I have already explored the destination, I could guide and tell students more about the country in a better way.

Lastly, I would like to know the itnerary of the trip like, the cities that we will be covered , lodging arrangements and food facilities as I am afraid there may be many vegetarians kids as well.

Looking forward to your response.

Yours Faithfully,
Prerna Arora

Votes
Average: 8.7 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 19, Rule ID: IN_REGARD_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'regarding' or 'with regard to'.
Suggestion: regarding; with regard to
Dear Mam, I am writting you in regards to the international tour that the school ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 215, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ng to go along and can be of some help. I am elated to inform you that I am inter...
^
Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ested to join you on in this trip. I have shown my eagerness because until n...
^
Line 6, column 83, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...w, I have gone out with my spouse only. I am extremely excited this time as there...
^
Line 9, column 95, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...like, the cities that we will be covered , lodging arrangements and food facilitie...
^^
Line 9, column 198, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e may be many vegetarians kids as well. Looking forward to your response. ...
^^^^^
Line 13, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... Looking forward to your response. Yours Faithfully, Prerna Arora
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, lastly, look, may, moreover, so, thus, well, you know, i am afraid

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 4.92783505155 203% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.03092783505 231% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 33.0 32.9175257732 100% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 26.3917525773 99% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 945.0 937.175257732 101% => OK
No of words: 206.0 206.0 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.58737864078 4.54256449028 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.78849575616 3.78020617076 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65826057282 2.54303337028 105% => OK
Unique words: 125.0 127.690721649 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.606796116505 0.622605031667 97% => OK
syllable_count: 299.7 290.88556701 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.8463117112 44.8134815571 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.9090909091 76.5299724578 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7272727273 16.8248392259 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.90909090909 4.34317383033 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 2.54639175258 275% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 7.41237113402 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185031341287 0.216113520407 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0683921937411 0.0766984524023 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0541306835576 0.0603063233224 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1044752528 0.12726935374 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0404214361891 0.0580467560999 70% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 8.37731958763 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 70.7449484536 87% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 7.45979381443 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 8.71597938144 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 7.59969072165 103% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 41.2886597938 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 87.0786516854 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.75 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.