Your local hospital has advertised for people to do unpaid work helping at the hospital. You would like to do some work at the hospital in your free time.
Write a letter to the hospital. In your letter
explain why you would like to do unpaid work at the hospital
say what type of unpaid work you would be able to do
give details of when you would be available for this work
Dear Sir,
I am writing to you in response to your advertisement on your official website for seeking volunteers to do voluntary work at your hospital.
I am a recently arrived overseas student and currently taking a postgraduate study in the child’s psychological program at Melbourne University. I am living in Carlton Street, which is just located 2 blocks away from your hospital. The reasons for why I would like to work in your hospital are that I had experienced to work in a hospital in my country and I realized that how much I had enjoyed being helper. Also, I wish to apply my knowledge to help people who may have any emotional problems. Furthermore, I love to look after people - especially young children.
Base on my interested and my background, I would like to work in the children’s department and hold some outdoor or indoor activities for them regularly. As you are no doubt aware, children may frequently have emotional issues when they have been staying in the hospital for a long period. Hence, I would like to assist them to release their strains by my work.
I am available after 12pm from Monday to Thursday and every Saturday. Should you have any further queries regarding my background, please do not hesitate to contact me at the email address or mobile phone number provided above. I am looking forward to being interviewed.
Yours faithfully,
Jenny Chan
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 151, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ogical program at Melbourne University. I am living in Carlton Street, which is j...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, hence, look, may, regarding, so, no doubt
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 32.9175257732 106% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 26.3917525773 140% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1175.0 937.175257732 125% => OK
No of words: 238.0 206.0 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93697478992 4.54256449028 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.92775363542 3.78020617076 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95141947382 2.54303337028 116% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 127.690721649 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.621848739496 0.622605031667 100% => OK
syllable_count: 364.5 290.88556701 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.360824742268 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.819433548 44.8134815571 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.3846153846 76.5299724578 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3076923077 16.8248392259 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.61538461538 4.34317383033 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.387466375228 0.216113520407 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111043693985 0.0766984524023 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111186606858 0.0603063233224 184% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.236074995517 0.12726935374 185% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.125213194169 0.0580467560999 216% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 8.37731958763 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 70.7449484536 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 7.45979381443 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 8.71597938144 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 7.59969072165 112% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 41.2886597938 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 8.62886597938 162% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.