The continued rise in the world’s population is the greatest problem faced by humanity at the present time.What are the causes of this continued rise?Do you agree that it is the greatest problem faced by humanity?

According to a survey, there is an alarming rise in the world’s population. Some people assume that the continued rise in the world’s population is the biggest problem faced by humanity currently. I agree to this statement to a certain extent as I believe some people may find other problems to be the greatest problems faced by them.

In my opinion, I think the reason that leads to this continued increase is due to the cultural practice. In the past, it is common that people think the more offspring they have, the better the family is. This is probably because old-fashioned people feel that after a couple getting married, they should give births. One point worth to mention is that their mind-set has always been thinking that a boy is more valuable than a girl. If their first offspring is a baby girl, they will continue to give birth until they get a boy. Although it is an old-fashioned mind-set, many parents still have this type of thinking even at the present moment.

The other reason which I think can lead to the increasing in world’s population is because there are some countries which are facing a lower number of population. This has brought to the government’s policy to subsidize low-income level families to give birth. This means the more the children a family has, the more subsidies they will get. The subsidies given by the government could be the expenses on medical care and education. Apart from that, grants made to the families will also be the encouragement for the family to give birth.

Nonetheless, from my point of view, this is not the only major problem faced by humanity at the present moment. The other biggest problem that could be faced by the people is the hiking of unemployment rate. This issue is not a newly discussed issue as it has been the headline if many newspapers and magazines for innumerable times. The factor for the occurrence of unemployment rate is due to people find it hard to survive if they work in their home country simply because the salary is too low for them to cover their daily expenditure. In addition, the fresh graduates of Medicine courses could not get a housemanship placement in a public hospital as the government says ‘Doctors have been too many in this country’.

In conclusion, it could not be denied that the biggest problem faced by humanity at the present time is the continued increase in the number of people around the globe based on some people’s perspective. However, I personally think that another biggest problem that is faced by the society is the increase in unemployment rate. This could be a worrying issue as the country will lose its future leaders and talents when more and more people migrate to other countries.

Votes
Average: 7.2 (2 votes)

Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'nonetheless', 'so', 'still', 'apart from', 'i think', 'in addition', 'in conclusion', 'in my opinion']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.232876712329 0.247107183377 94% => OK
Verbs: 0.166340508806 0.155533422707 107% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0919765166341 0.0946595960268 97% => OK
Adverbs: 0.041095890411 0.0501214627716 82% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0489236790607 0.0437548338989 112% => OK
Prepositions: 0.115459882583 0.122226691241 94% => OK
Participles: 0.0430528375734 0.0403226058552 107% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.68254057778 2.80594681477 96% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0352250489237 0.0326793684256 108% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00163938923432 0% => More particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.14481409002 0.0861772015684 168% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0234833659491 0.021408717616 110% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0117416829746 0.011925033212 98% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2749.0 1933.35771543 142% => OK
No of words: 472.0 316.048096192 149% => OK
Chars per words: 5.82415254237 6.12580529183 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6610686524 4.20517956788 111% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.319915254237 0.374742101984 85% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.243644067797 0.28420135186 86% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.169491525424 0.203846283523 83% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.108050847458 0.137316102897 79% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68254057778 2.80594681477 96% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 176.037074148 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.444915254237 0.56093040696 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 49.8230106054 60.7387585426 82% => OK
How many sentences: 22.0 16.0891783567 137% => OK
Sentence length: 21.4545454545 20.7743622355 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.2314928533 49.517814964 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.954545455 127.492653851 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4545454545 20.7743622355 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.590909090909 0.814263465372 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38877755511 114% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 3.99599198397 0% => OK
Readability: 45.8189522342 49.1944974215 93% => OK
Elegance: 1.52671755725 1.69124875643 90% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.623812880697 0.332605444948 188% =>OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.142102664383 0.102741220458 138% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0882497555485 0.0668466124924 132% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.567408011607 0.534860350844 106% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.093344927371 0.148594505496 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.270735402542 0.134430193775 201% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.166426576561 0.0742795772207 224% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.462184236228 0.324371583561 142% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0934445756069 0.0638462369009 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.456754733716 0.228012699653 200% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0757901386754 0.058150111329 130% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.68436873747 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.41683366733 176% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 5.90881763527 118% => OK
Negative topic words: 7.0 2.5751503006 272% => OK
Neutral topic words: 5.0 1.9629258517 255% => OK
Total topic words: 19.0 10.4468937876 182% => OK

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Rates: 74.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9