As a result of electronic inventions such as computer and televition people do less physical activity, and this is having a negative effect on their health. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In today’s moderen world, technology changes lifestyle everyones and it makes negative effect and positive affect for us. Recently, computer and televisions have enormous change in the earth. People spend a lot of time on computer and televition without care about their activites and healh.
On the one hand, people use computers and televition more than four hours per day, without to use something which can protect our body. For example, using computers overlong destroy the ability of your ayes to see. Children at least much of the time, like waching televition and playing computer every day, but their parents tend to do not pay attention about their children. as a result, so many children use glasses at a young age, so it makes very dengerous to their future.
Obviously, computers and television have positive effect for all people in the world, because with technology we can get much knowledge, many experience, and information around the world. Large numbers of people believe to know science very important more then health.
In conclusion, tecnology has less negative effect more than positive effect technology makes your life more simple and easier, you just try to care about your health, because health more important than the others.
technology changes lifestyle everyones
technology changes everyone's lifestyles
and it makes negative effect and positive affect for us.
and it makes negative effects and positive effects for us.
without care about their activites and healh.
without caring about their activities and health.
Sentence: On the one hand, people use computers and televition more than four hours per day, without to use something which can protect our body.
Description: A preposition is not usually followed by an infinitival to
Suggestion: Refer to without and to
using computers overlong destroy the ability
using computers too long destroys the ability
Children at least much of the time,
Description: what is the verb for this sentence? can you re-write this sentence?
Sentence: Large numbers of people believe to know science very important more then health.
Description: The fragment more then health is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace then with adjective
Sentence: In today's moderen world, technology changes lifestyle everyones and it makes negative effect and positive affect for us.
Error: moderen Suggestion: modern
Error: everyones Suggestion: everyone
Sentence: People spend a lot of time on computer and televition without care about their activites and healh.
Error: activites Suggestion: activities
Error: healh Suggestion: heal
Error: televition Suggestion: television
Sentence: On the one hand, people use computers and televition more than four hours per day, without to use something which can protect our body.
Error: televition Suggestion: television
Sentence: Children at least much of the time, like waching televition and playing computer every day, but their parents tend to do not pay attention about their children. as a result, so many children use glasses at a young age, so it makes very dengerous to their future.
Error: televition Suggestion: television
Error: dengerous Suggestion: dangerous
Error: waching Suggestion: washing
Sentence: In conclusion, tecnology has less negative effect more than positive effect technology makes your life more simple and easier, you just try to care about your health, because health more important than the others.
Error: tecnology Suggestion: technology
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