As a result of electronic inventions such as the computer and television, people do less physical activity, and this is having a negative effect on their health.To what extent do you agree or disagree

In today's era, era of colossal development technology has spread its wings through out the world with numerous inventions like mobile phones, computers, laptops, television and so on. Thus, enhances the lazyness and mitigate the physical fitness in human beings qhicb possess bad effect on their health. In my notion, I agree with the given statement as I would pen down my views in following paragraphs.

Firstly, advancement of automation has been increased to huge extent which not only making people's life easier but on the other side also effecting their health negatively. For example, invention of mechanical objects like computers and television and there usage by human beings are on rise as they spend alot of theur time on technological devices rather than spending time on exercise or other physical activities. Secondly, new developments has made life so easy and effort less that even when people feel hungry instead of going out for eating they order the food by sitting at home through devices.

Moreover, not only adults but children also getting addicted to these machinery. To exemplify, playing with children is a kind of exercise for both parents and chikdren but parents nowadays are so busy in theur work that they are endulging their chikdren to watch cartoons on television and playing indoor games consequently endurance is decreasing. Furthermore, young ones prefer to playing games and watching movies and avoid playing outside or going to gym for fitness because of the facilities provided by computers and televisions. Adding to it people give more preference to tachmical devices which directly effect their heaktb and give rise to several diseases. To add more, people prefer to sit home therefore metabolic changes occur in their body, become obese,reduce flexibility and stamina.

In a conclusion, advancement snd development in technology has made the life easier but on the flip side effecting the health of the people negatively which reduces their physical activity and give rise to enormous diseases.

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, furthermore, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, for example, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1723.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 326.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28527607362 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73630120297 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 176.041082164 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.588957055215 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 545.4 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.7516193088 49.4020404114 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.583333333 106.682146367 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.1666666667 20.7667163134 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5833333333 7.06120827912 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158870265337 0.244688304435 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0577154133154 0.084324248473 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0452923649945 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103284995977 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0296402319834 0.056905535591 52% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 50.2224549098 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.38 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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