Write about the following topic:
Computers and modems have made it possible for office workers to do much of their work from home instead of working in offices every day. Working from home should be encouraged as it is good for workers and employers.
Do you agree or disagree?
Write at least 250 words.
In recent years, the vast expansion of information and communication technology has made widely practical for teleworking. Although in many cases of office workers could be made geographically independent by using modems, computers, faxes, cell phones and Bluetooth, few companies and employees take full advantages of this possibility.
There are a number of arguments in favor of allowing workers to work from home. Firstly, costs of employment would be reduced. Secondly, employees would feel convenient and could provide the higher standard of job achievements. The worker’s life would be improved in a variety ways, because employees would not need to travel to work, which would give them more free time. Finally, employees could enjoy social lives by meeting with their colleagues or coworkers in a casual way.
However, not all arguments are in favor of employees to work from home. Some arguments are against of employees to work from home. Firstly, employees could get distracted easily. Secondly, companies would have difficulties to get chase of work. For example, it would be harder to monitor employee’s work procedures as the work has to be transferred through the online or through the fax. Therefore, it may not meet the company’s high standard and due to other distractions, employees might not even finish the work on time. Finally, for the social aspects of the work, employees could miss of being in the office and be socialize with other people (colleagues, customers or clients).
In conclusion, I believe that while many workers welcome the opportunity to work at home, others would find the chance to work from home very convenient. Where possible, I think the workers should be offered the choice, but not forced to work from home unless they wish to.
has made widely practical for teleworking.
has made teleworking widely practical.
Although in many cases of office workers could be made geographically independent by using modems, computers, faxes
Although in many cases office works could be made geographically independent by using modems, computers, faxes
Sentence: Finally, for the social aspects of the work, employees could miss of being in the office and be socialize with other people colleagues, customers or clients.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to people and colleagues
flaws:
Don't write essays like reports, like:
Firstly, costs of employment would be reduced. Secondly, employees would feel convenient...
After you write: 'Firstly, costs of employment would be reduced.' then you need to develop:
1. reasons why costs of employment would be reduced?
2. examples for 'costs of employment would be reduced.',
3. what are the advantages of 'costs of employment would be reduced.'
Do the same thing for 'Secondly, employees would feel convenient...'
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Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 5.5 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 288 350
No. of Characters: 1446 1500
No. of Different Words: 159 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.12 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.021 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.708 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 101 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 78 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 54 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.483 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.368 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.553 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.144 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5