Somepeoplethinkthatmuseumsandartgalleriesshouldconcentrateontheworksoftheirowncountriesinsteadoftheworksofartfrom otherpartsoftheworld.Towhatextentdoyouagreeordisagre

Essay topics: Somepeoplethinkthatmuseumsandartgalleriesshouldconcentrateontheworksoftheirowncountriesinsteadoftheworksofartfrom otherpartsoftheworld.Towhatextentdoyouagreeordisagre

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Asmuseumsandartgallerieshavelongbeentheforefrontofpreserving
culturalvaluesandhistories,therehasbeenmuchdiscussionabout
whethertheyshouldmainlydisplaydomesticculturalartefactorawider
collectionofartworkscreatedbyanyartistsfromallovertheworld.Asfar
asIam concerned,aninternationalcollectionofartworkswouldbring
enormousbenefits.
Firstly,itcanpositivelycontributetoculturalunderstanding.Undeniably,
notsomepeoplecannotaffordtotravelabroadandeveniftheydo,they
areunlikelytogettoknowforeignculturedeeplyastourists.Inthiscase,
museumsprovideagreatopportunityforthegeneralpublictobeexposed
todiverseculture,eventuallyenablingthemtoacquiretheknowledgeasto
art,historyanddifferentminds.
Moreover,viewedfrom theangleoftheprosperityofculturalindustry,
museumsandartgalleriesshouldhousetherelicsfrom othercountries.
Forartlovers,bothplacesopenagatewayforthemtoappreciateavariety
ofartworksandantiqueswithdistinctnationalidentities,throughwhich
theycanidentifywhatconnectsanddifferentiatescountriesfrom each
other.Asaresult,theycanbeinspiredbythoseartworksandbuildtheir
ownaestheticviews,creatingmoreworks.
However,proponentsofmuseumsshowcasingworksfrom theirown
countryarguethatitcanhelpdomesticpeoplebuildtheconnectionwith
theirnativeculture.Ifexposedtomoreexoticculture,theyoungmightfeel
thattheirownculturedoesnotdeservepreservation.So,museumsand
galleriesneedtoserveaseducationalcenterswherelocalpeoplecanfully
know theirownhistoryandgainthesenseofbelonging.Nevertheless,
displayingworksfrom othercountriesdoesnotoverridethebasicrightof
nationstopreservetheirownhistory.
Inconclusion,museumsandgalleriesshouldshow amixtureofworks
from theirowncountryaswellasotherareas.From myperspective,
individualsshould haveabroaderview ofculturein thecontextof
globalization

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, well

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 0.0 13.1623246493 0% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 7.85571142285 0% => OK
Conjunction : 0.0 10.4138276553 0% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 0.0 7.30460921844 0% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 1.0 24.0651302605 4% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 41.998997996 5% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1772.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 44.0 315.596192385 14% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 40.2727272727 5.12529762239 786% => Less chars per word wanted.
Fourth root words length: 2.5755095769 4.20363070211 61% => OK
Word Length SD: 22.32591053 2.80592935109 796% => Word_Length_SD is high.
Unique words: 44.0 176.041082164 25% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 1.0 0.561755894193 178% => OK
syllable_count: 493.2 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 11.2 1.60771543086 697% => Avg_syllables_per_word is high.

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 16.0721442886 37% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 7.0 20.2975951904 34% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 112.643118841 49.4020404114 228% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 295.333333333 106.682146367 277% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 7.33333333333 20.7667163134 35% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 11.0 7.06120827912 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 29.0 4.38176352705 662% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 23.0 5.01903807615 458% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 8.67935871743 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.244688304435 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.084324248473 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0667982634062 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.151304729494 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.056905535591 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 171.9 13.0946893788 1313% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -747.79 50.2224549098 -1489% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 17.1 7.44779559118 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 119.3 11.3001002004 1056% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 213.62 12.4159519038 1721% => Coleman_liau_index is high.
dale_chall_readability_score: 18.7 8.58950901804 218% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 41.0 78.4519038076 52% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 4.8 10.1190380762 47% => Gunning_fog is low.
text_standard: 214.0 10.7795591182 1985% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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