12.Fifeen years ago, Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors. Since that time, Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall student grade averages at Omega have risen by 30 percent. Potential employers, looking at this dramatic rise in grades, believe that grades at Omega are inflated and do not accurately reflect student achievement; as a result, Omega graduates have not been as successful at getting jobs as have graduates from nearby Alpha University. To enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should terminate student evaluation of professors.
While it might be true to evaluate the effectiveness of the rating system of professors to promise the school's competition with Alpha university, its unstated assumptions are rife with holes and make the author's argument vulnerable in logic.
First, the author begins with the statement that after implementing the new rating system, the grades made by professors toward students increased coincidently. Within such argument, the assumption is that these professors give higher grades so as to gain greater reputation among students and schools. Here, no data concerning these students' last year scores is given to support the writer's opinion. If last year these students grades were staying in average level, it is reasonable to assume that higher grades assignment is illegal. But on condition that in last year, the grades were at the lower, or even, the lowest point ever? Hence, to strongly validate the author's argument, citing last year grades may be a good way. Also, the words, "overall", "average", as mentioned in the passage indicates that the writer could not conduct a precise study, making the argument vague and obscure. For example, for the average word, it is easy to be challenged by an another situation, some extremely high grade occurred in easy courses may overshadow the low grades of courses esoteric. Thus, making a more precise argument needs to contain a comprehensive research.
Secondly, the author implies that the suddenly increased grades may lead to a bad impression to employers because they may consider that the grades are inflated and these students have no corresponding achievement. Here, there are rarely connections between grades and achievements, and employers have their own way to recruit potential promising students. For example, students only have to choose one of their study lives, a high GPA or a number of experiences, which means that students with high GPA usually have no more time devoting in extra experiences, as people with rich background have no it improving their GPA either. Hence, employers know how to test their ability with suitable methods.
Finally, since the author assumes that high grades make students suffer from the distrust from potential employers, their graduates would not as competitive as graduates from a nearby university, Alpha university. The author' assumptions underlying such argument are that either in past the competition of graduates from both universities is relatively the same or Alpha university's grading system is more reasonable. Unfortunately, there are no evidence are cited as the grounds of the preceding assumptions. So if the core competition of Alpha university has a large gap with that of Omega university, and if the grades made by professors are also high in the opposite university, the author's idea is going to be taken apart in that employers may no change their attitude just because of relatively scores above the average. Moreover, the decision on hiring which universities is largely based on the feedback of former employers and performances of previous employees hired form such university. So it should also be taken into account.
In a nutshell, it might be said that no convincing deduction in the passage is given, and the writer fails to take alternative evidence to complete his idea. The argument ends up with an outright untenable conclusion based on wishy-washy findings that are possible to be inaccurate. Thus, the writer fails to persuade the school to cut off the rating system.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ing system of professors to promise the schools competition with Alpha university, its ...
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...ptions are rife with holes and make the authors argument vulnerable in logic. Firs...
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...hat these professors give higher grades so as to gain greater reputation among students ...
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...ast year scores is given to support the writers opinion. If last year these students gr...
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...t ever? Hence, to strongly validate the authors argument, citing last year grades may b...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, hence, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus, while, as to, for example, of course
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 13.1623246493 205% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 7.30460921844 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 75.0 41.998997996 179% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 8.3376753507 240% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2979.0 1615.20841683 184% => OK
No of words: 563.0 315.596192385 178% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29129662522 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87110059796 4.20363070211 116% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97446030406 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 277.0 176.041082164 157% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492007104796 0.561755894193 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 947.7 506.74238477 187% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 13.0 2.52805611222 514% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 16.0721442886 143% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.4432070391 49.4020404114 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.52173913 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4782608696 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.08695652174 7.06120827912 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.01903807615 239% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.9879759519 301% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213821563117 0.244688304435 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0565222372166 0.084324248473 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0482218374684 0.0667982634062 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0996625733089 0.151304729494 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0593958567775 0.056905535591 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 147.0 78.4519038076 187% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.