22. Nowadays parents put too much pressure on their children to succeed. What is the reason for doing this? Is it a negative or positive development?
In a fast-paced society, parents have put heavy pressure on children from studying to daily habits with the hope that they will have a successful life. Various reasons explain why children deal with parental pressure, while I still believe that this tendency can bring many negative effects.
There are several reasons to compile the children by their father or mother. First and foremost, the desire to improve the quality of education in their children's academic careers. Parents believe that educating children earlier is better with educational background, and high scores can help children succeed in the future. For instance, some parents strictly manage spare time with extra homework or classes in lieu of playing outdoor activities with peers. Furthermore, there are high requirements of society for the young generations, such as certification and qualification that play a vital role in having a well-paid job. As a result, parents put much pressure on children to encourage them to try hard to gain what parents want.
It seems to me that keeping some intentional force on their kids will cause a solemn problem. Firstly, kids are easily prone to experiencing mental illness due to many factors derived from high parental expectations. If this problem often occurs, children can affect psychologically and physically, such as depression, sleep deprivation, and an eating disorder. Low academic at school contributes to the influence when kids suffer from various depression that leads to tired and bored with studying and getting scores. As a result, parental pressure not only discourages children but also creates disappointment in their scores.
In conclusion, parents want to improve their children's futures by applying too much pressure. It is something advantageous and carries some negative results, so developing good communication channels between younger and adults would result in better decisions.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, so, still, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1632.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 297.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.49494949495 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88955201041 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.626262626263 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 493.2 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.8328343269 49.4020404114 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 108.8 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.8 7.06120827912 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.32325282215 0.244688304435 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104402394695 0.084324248473 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0746809198533 0.0667982634062 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.185234601548 0.151304729494 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0514261764311 0.056905535591 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.56 12.4159519038 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.47 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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