Advertisement Writing Task 2 An increasing number of advertisements on TV aim at children What are the effects of television advertising Should television advertising be controlled

An enormous number of advertisements now are exclusively made for children. Their major aim is to seduce children to buy their products no matter whether they are suitable for them or not. I think inappropriate advertisement could result in irrecoverable influences on children if necessary supervision and control be neglected.

First and foremost, TV commercials are displayed at first, middle and end of the children programs and are adeptly filmed and fabricated in order to persuade youngster to buy their goods. Mostly, products advertised in TV consist of cookies, pastries and chips that are seriously hazardous for children health. Nevertheless, authorities do not make use of their leverage to sensor these disastrous ads. As a result, in this era communities have faced with obesity and incurable disease such as diabetes and over-weighting because of consumption of greasy and high calories food advertised in TV. It would be wise if government be more cautious about the concept of TV commercial produced by companies.

On the other hand, being obsessed by purchasing advertisement products, children could not be prosperous in their future life. Furthermore, Children TV ads are somehow deceptive and tricky which provoke people especially young one to whatever they see in them regardless of thinking about its utility. So this unfair habit would be evolutionary carved in the behavior of children and led to misconception of money management in long perspective. As a matter of fact, this indirectly contribute to hardship of not having adequate money in urgent. Therefore, from the early age parent ought to be more awake about making their children conscious regarding these unreal advertisements that get money out of their pockets readily.

To put it into a nutshell, lack of appropriate caution and control on advertisement would result in children both health and future. Parent and government should take more and immediate action with regard to cutting these commercials out.

Votes
Average: 7.1 (3 votes)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 565, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'calories'' or 'calorie's', 'calory's'?
Suggestion: calories'; calorie's; calory's
...cause of consumption of greasy and high calories food advertised in TV. It would be wise...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, nevertheless, regarding, so, therefore, i think, such as, as a matter of fact, as a result, with regard to, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1695.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 314.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.39808917197 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09423873668 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.617834394904 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 524.7 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.4736835164 49.4020404114 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.0 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9333333333 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2666666667 7.06120827912 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.9879759519 251% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.295794816572 0.244688304435 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103112778847 0.084324248473 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0820173037736 0.0667982634062 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18926021741 0.151304729494 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0450405455656 0.056905535591 79% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.04 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.31 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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