Commercials have radically succeeded in the modern era, especially as the advertisement industry holds a significant place in the marketing world. I agree with the notion that commercials compel buyers to purchase in large amounts instead of focusing on their product quality. In order to prove this, the reasons described in the next paragraphs.
To embark upon, advertisements often exaggerate or even distort the quality of their product. In fact, in the digital age, celebrity endorsements or sponsored videos on social media are also more subtle forms, exaggerating product quality of advertising that have been becoming increasingly popular. According to a Harvard survey, up to 80% of consumers complain that they bought a product of poor quality that can not be used. Without a doubt, consumers tend to buy something on impulse that actually may be useless to them after watching an enticing advert. As a result, chances are they have to discard that item sooner or later.
The second important reason is that children put pressure on parents to buy them products. Nowadays, a host of different manufacturers are trying to produce and sell similar products; therefore, the competition among companies these days is more competitive than ever. Thus, companies are likely to focus on prospective customers and children are one of them due to the fact that vivid graphics which are broadcast on advertisements make them keep pestering or nagging their parents to buy more and more products.
In conclusion, for the reasons I mentioned above, I believe that advertising often encourages us to purchase objects in a large quantity rather than promote products in value. It would be better if consumers who view advertisements should be aware of their influence.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, if, may, second, so, therefore, thus, in conclusion, in fact, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1493.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 283.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27561837456 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96357540113 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.614840989399 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 470.7 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.9069490622 49.4020404114 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.846153846 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7692307692 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.84615384615 7.06120827912 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153628976782 0.244688304435 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0471083855819 0.084324248473 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0351151001792 0.0667982634062 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0824332772772 0.151304729494 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0236007683183 0.056905535591 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.64 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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