For all children, the ability to play a musical instrument is just as important as the ability to read and write?
How far do you agree with this suggestion? How important is it for a child to learn to play a musical instrument, in your view?
It is sometimes argued that playing music should be equally valued as reading and writing skills. In my opinion it would be wrong to force school children to learn luxurious subjects like music.
It has been said that time is gold. Therefore, we should be wise to use the asset efficiently. Firstly, not all pupils are interested in playing music. If the lessons are required, there will be unnecessary pressures on young people leading to fatigue. Furthermore, it is obvious that all students do not plan to be musician later in their lives. Therefore, they may feel their time is being wasted by the schools which may discourage them to be punctual at schools. In addition to that, it would be immoral to require school children to spend their time and energy on unimportant subjects that they are not talented in.
In my opinion, excepting musically talented and passionate people, music is not important to learn. It is clear that music lessons are not the basic requirements for learning other skills as reading and writing are. For example, if we are not literate in reading and writing, we cannot make any progress in school or even we will be challenged in everyday life. However, there are students who have music in their perspective. This is the only time that I support music as an optional course for students which should be offered by schools.
In conclusion, I think music is not as essential as other school courses like reading, in the meantime, school should provide opportunities for musical genius and interested people.
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...r musical genius and interested people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, so, therefore, while, for example, i think, in addition, in conclusion, in my opinion, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 13.1623246493 205% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1347.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 272.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95220588235 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06108636974 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71005263279 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.540441176471 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 413.1 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.9580891546 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.8 106.682146367 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1333333333 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.6 7.06120827912 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195369278442 0.244688304435 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0761654445066 0.084324248473 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0755666003674 0.0667982634062 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128712695768 0.151304729494 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0604710387389 0.056905535591 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 13.0946893788 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.13 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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