Some believe that education of musical instrument should have equal important as reading and writting. I totally disagree with that because I believe that knowledge of music equipment should depends on interest of student rather than making compulsary. While, I will explain which children have need to learn it.
There are several reason for against of that view, Firstly, Reading and writting are essential for study without it student cannot get any job, Whereas, learning of music is only way of entertainment as well as spending of free time. In fact, it is learnt by that children who have unique talent from birth and other only waste of their time. Therefore, study of musical instrument should be given option to the student for choosing it by education institiute, not make it compulsary for all children.
However, if we chose musical equipment as a neccessary subject, it would very benefical for future, because we can make it as a profession and it may make good source of income. For example, recent reserach shows that 20 percent of student chose music as career as a result they have become famoues in their country likewise punjabi singer ammy virk, nimrat khra and so on. Therfore, those people who give their best for learning music equipment eventualy become more successfull rather than with normal study.
In conclusion, music should not be mandatory in school, it's depends upon student's interest. Otherwise, it may become borden of those student who does not like it.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 192, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'should' requires the base form of the verb: 'depend'
Suggestion: depend
...hat knowledge of music equipment should depends on interest of student rather than maki...
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Line 1, column 254, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... student rather than making compulsary. While, I will explain which children have nee...
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Line 2, column 11, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun reason seems to be countable; consider using: 'several reasons'.
Suggestion: several reasons
...ldren have need to learn it. There are several reason for against of that view, Firstly, Read...
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Line 2, column 419, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nt should be given option to the student for choosing it by education institiute,...
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Line 4, column 127, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this student' or 'those students'?
Suggestion: this student; those students
...est. Otherwise, it may become borden of those student who does not like it.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, likewise, may, so, therefore, well, whereas, while, for example, in conclusion, in fact, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1249.0 1615.20841683 77% => OK
No of words: 248.0 315.596192385 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03629032258 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96837696647 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52487301481 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.604838709677 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 393.3 506.74238477 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.7798901582 49.4020404114 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.545454545 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5454545455 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.8181818182 7.06120827912 182% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22406911072 0.244688304435 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.088374282393 0.084324248473 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0648221215678 0.0667982634062 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13061110085 0.151304729494 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0638721775997 0.056905535591 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 78.4519038076 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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