All the mothers and fathers should be required to take childcare training courses What is your opinion

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All the mothers and fathers should be required to take childcare training courses. What is your opinion?

Talking about parents should attend training courses in order to protect and take care their children. In my opinion, I totally agree with both parents need to learn about how to bring up their children.
It is the key to grow up their family and protection their children about everything. Firstly, it is certainly essential that parents learn the basic knowledge of childcare, for examples when they first have a baby especially the yearly months and years if they have a variety knowledge how to understand a baby’s needs and medical problems leading to the baby’s safety, thanks to they could easily put their baby at risk or not be ready to respond to critical situations in the right way. Secondly, parents should be responsible for their children. Attending the training courses, most parents provide a lot of experience from teachers or maybe other people owning to improve skills in order to protect their children from strangers.
Moreover, most both parents want to spend a lot of time for their children so that when attending the courses helping they can playing or learning with their children. It helps them to look through the strength or weakness of their kids.
In conclusion, nowadays living in developing countries, many young parents want to bring up for their kids by attending training courses which have a positive effect for both physically and mentally for them.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 128, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'play'
Suggestion: play
... attending the courses helping they can playing or learning with their children. It hel...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, look, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, for example, in conclusion, talking about, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1172.0 1615.20841683 73% => OK
No of words: 232.0 315.596192385 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05172413793 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.90276135726 4.20363070211 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59303695806 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 129.0 176.041082164 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.556034482759 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 333.0 506.74238477 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 104.188338486 49.4020404114 211% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 130.222222222 106.682146367 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7777777778 20.7667163134 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.2222222222 7.06120827912 187% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0708863536262 0.244688304435 29% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0424698476062 0.084324248473 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0463601059191 0.0667982634062 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0478456380427 0.151304729494 32% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0394156599546 0.056905535591 69% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 78.4519038076 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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