Behavior in schools is getting worse. Explain the causes of this problem and suggest some possible solutions.
Children wouldn’t be children if they didn’t misbehave now and again but recently we have seen a spike in such behavior. Especially in schools where their conduct has become very worrisome. In this essay I will explore some of the reasons for this trend and also provide some possible solutions.
In todays age, the rise in mischief can be attributed to two main factors, unrestricted entertainment and the cessation of corporal punishment. In the past, children were exposed to only a few cartoons which would have some type of a moral story to tell. Whereas today, the kids are exposed to unlimited shows and videogames without any checks and balance. This have had a very negative impact on their personality. A recent survey in Sweden showed that kids who were exposed to violent computer games caused more trouble in schools than others. Secondly, the removal of corporal punishment haven’t helped this situation at all. Until very recently, parents who had misbehaving children would send them to boarding schools, so that they could learn some discipline and responsibility. With the ending of physical punishment, these schools are now no different than any others.
Even though it’s a very complicated and sensitive topic, there are some relatively simple steps that could be taken in order to curb this problem. The first thing that could be done is to restrict the children’s access to the internet and TV. They should be discouraged from staying up too late and also allowed to watch only those programs that have a decent moral story. Secondly, I believe that corporal punishment should be allowed back in certain situations. If used correctly, it can have some benefits. Majority of the people who had received corporal punishments in boarding schools believed that it was crucial for their character development, according to poll done last year. Therefore, it’s necessary to be strict for the betterment of the kids.
In conclusion, although there could be many reasons for juvenile misdemeanor, TV and lack of punishments are important ones. In my opinion they can be dealt with by restricted TV and appropriately punishing the children when needed.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, whereas, as to, in conclusion, in fact, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1835.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 355.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16901408451 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79034524424 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.588732394366 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 558.9 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.0069689611 49.4020404114 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.75 106.682146367 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.75 20.7667163134 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.4 7.06120827912 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 17.0 3.9879759519 426% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.13759101343 0.244688304435 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0406820175403 0.084324248473 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0505319463038 0.0667982634062 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0873246948176 0.151304729494 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0660182692102 0.056905535591 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.0946893788 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.41 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 78.4519038076 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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