Being a celebrity- such as a famous film star or sports personality – bring problems as well as benefits.
Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems?
It’s fascinating for every individual to relish fame and fortune but for most of them it brings some disadvantages as well. To be renowned round the globe feels quite glamorous but at the same time it takes lot more sacrifices. As per my point of view, it takes more efforts to become prominent than its benefits.
As we all know that the idea of becoming popular sounds quite charming because they get all the important attention and lime light coupled with hefty amount of money that one can only dream of. For instance, a young guy of a middle class family, hailing from a small town of Portugal, struggled throughout his childhood to finally become a leading soccer player, quelling his poverty and cherishing his dreams, known as Christiano Ronaldo has become the role model for millions of people on earth.
Trapped in the charm of lavish lifestyle of eminent stars, people often forget what it takes to reach that particular level? It requires an everlasting, commitment and determination to their goal, resulting in sacrificing their personal life followed by sheer hard work. By the time they reach their goal, they realize how much they have lost during the journey.
But at the same time, many people are unaware of the drawbacks of being distinguished and destined. They carry lot more responsibility not only to protect their own image but their family, country and the industry they are associated with. Due to this added pressure, they often become victim of anxiety and stress. A few years back, whole World came to a shock, when suspicious death of Heath Ledger was surfaced in News revealing a bitter reality, that, behind the scene, how much stressful life our beloved superstars have?
To recapitulate, after considering all the above arguments, we can reach the apparently luxurious lifestyle of celebrities comes at a very hefty cost of inner satisfaction and peace of mind.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, but, finally, if, so, well, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1593.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 319.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99373040752 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66240368696 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.648902821317 0.561755894193 116% => OK
syllable_count: 495.0 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.7563450493 49.4020404114 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.538461538 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5384615385 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 7.06120827912 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0895747683429 0.244688304435 37% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0324757073542 0.084324248473 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.035951491476 0.0667982634062 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0499451816994 0.151304729494 33% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0546445414578 0.056905535591 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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