celebrities are more influential on young people
Young people are in an impressionable age. Several factors are influential on them and they could easily get influenced by them. One of the constant complaints of parents is about the degree in which their children are influenced by celebrities. They usually think that what celebrities wear and say could determine the way that their children would wear and speak too. However some people disagree with this issue and they claim that parents themselves are more influenced by celebrities, but I'm of the opinion that the former viewpoint is more correct and several reasons support my idea.
First of all, age is a crucial and determining factor of the level in which we are impressionable. Several psychological researches have proved this fact that the more aged people are, the less impressionable they are. One reason for this fact is that our experience would be accumulated during our life. When people experience different situations in their life, their attitude toward different concepts would get more complicated. They get aware of different aspects of an event and it's unlikely they would get impressed by only one facet of an event or issue. For instance when a singer sings about poverty it would radically spur on young people to do something for poor people. They are probably for the first time confronted with the grief of poverty and it has stimulated them to do something to help the poor people. However, an aged person would not get impressed as much as a young person mostly because he has already gotten aware of sorrow of poverty and also he knows that it's impossible to solve this issue by individual attempts. He knows that all of these attempts that are driven by emotional stimuli are transient and would not last very long. So thanks to his experience he would not be deeply influenced by that singer, contrary to that young person.
Secondly, most celebrities are similar to young people. Indeed young people would determine who could be a celebrity and who can not be. This is because most of middle-aged or old-aged people don't have enough time or passion to pursue the works of celebrities, like actors or athletes. They are profoundly engaged in their own life affairs and they don't keep abreast of news related to celebrities. So those celebrities who have different viewpoints than young people would have less chance of being popular among [by] them and since the majority of celebrities' audience are young people, they would finally vanished from spotlight and wouldn't be followed by young people. On the other hand, when young people found their celebrities similar to themselves they are more influenced by them. As a general rule, people are more influenced by those similar to them. Since young people consider celebrities are similar to them, their actions and sayings are more influential on young people than aged people who are different from celebrities.
All in all, I believe celebrities are more influential on young people mostly because young people are less experienced and also celebrities have similar characters to young people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, for instance, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 13.1623246493 236% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 10.4138276553 202% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 20.0 7.30460921844 274% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 60.0 24.0651302605 249% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 41.998997996 152% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2576.0 1615.20841683 159% => OK
No of words: 513.0 315.596192385 163% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02144249513 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75914943092 4.20363070211 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67577074104 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 176.041082164 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.430799220273 0.561755894193 77% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 803.7 506.74238477 159% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 16.0721442886 149% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.0714763053 49.4020404114 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.333333333 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.375 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.45833333333 7.06120827912 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.426003751489 0.244688304435 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.142033864388 0.084324248473 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.161106283548 0.0667982634062 241% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.353168540457 0.151304729494 233% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.187799700779 0.056905535591 330% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.39 8.58950901804 86% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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