CELEBRITY
A famous person or celebrity become popular through media as well as due to people celebrity brings benefits along with problems.
To begin with, there are many benefits of being a celebrity. Firstly, as a celebrity become its own image or dignity. Every one know to famous person. Secondly, every person give regards and respect to the famous person. For example, Amir Khan is famous personality. Most of the people give respect and like his acting, work or physique. Thirdly, famous person have more money, comfort devices and more property. Moreover they can bring what they want.
On the other hand, there are more problems for celebrity. First of all, famous person cannot go anywhere lonely and cannot enjoy freedom with family. Moreover, famous person does not have enough time for their family and persue their hobbies. Furthermore, famous person have to go anywhere with security because of the crowd.
In addition to this, due to popularity media always spread news regarding famous person. Moreover, media create issues regarding personal or families problems.
In conclusion, being a famous film star or sports man take more benefits but, we cannot denied about negative effects.
Now, let us do thorough analysis of this IELTS writing task 2 response as follows:
Introduction: Strength:
The candidate has tried to attempt paraphrasing of question statement but it contains errors and leads to confusion for the reader.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 414, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...ney, comfort devices and more property. Moreover they can bring what they want. On ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 25, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...riting task 2 response as follows: Introduction: Strength: The candid...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, well, for example, in addition, in conclusion, as well as, first of all, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 7.30460921844 0% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 24.0651302605 46% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 41.998997996 62% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1244.0 1615.20841683 77% => OK
No of words: 231.0 315.596192385 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.38528138528 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.89854898053 4.20363070211 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4895651872 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 176.041082164 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.632034632035 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 378.9 506.74238477 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.2975951904 64% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.6777853063 49.4020404114 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.1764705882 106.682146367 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.5882352941 20.7667163134 65% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.6470588235 7.06120827912 165% => OK
Paragraphs: 8.0 4.38176352705 183% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0993548092328 0.244688304435 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0373187837224 0.084324248473 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10304108996 0.0667982634062 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0537320628404 0.151304729494 36% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.116618505449 0.056905535591 205% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 13.0946893788 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.28 50.2224549098 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.39 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 78.4519038076 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 4.5 9.78957915832 46% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.1190380762 71% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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