As children become adults, their social behaviour changes in some ways.
What are the main differences between young children’s social behaviour and that of adults? To what extent are thechanges that take place good?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write at least 250 words.
When grown up, children become adults and more mature. We find life less aethestic as when we were young, we start to consciously think about the world and we become more and more realistic. Those are differences in social behaviour– in my standpoint, between premature generation and grown-up.
As we were small, the world around us is full of mystery and beautiful. We dreamt of who to become, of places to go, of the relationships we are about to make. However, after experience some of those dreams, we would find out that it is extremely hard to become someone, to achieve something. To someone who suffered tremendous failures, lovely imagination would disappear forever.
Through suffering, we perceive the limit of each’s ability. Some decide to live with it, some decide to change in order to reach their dreams. No matter what choice ones make, those rational considerations mark one steps elevated from a child’s though to an adult’s cogitation. We are more thoughtful in which, besides imagine about our utiopia, we seriously scrutinize about whether to create it.
However, some elderlies stucked themselves in countless collapse and lost hope for improvement, they decided to live day-by-day in a place they were not belong to and in the jobs they did not deserve. These people have grown up into negative mature.
As far as I concern, the extent in which positive swing in social conducting from children to adults is pretty substantial. Obviously, it is some exceptions in which elderlies refuses to grow up, or decline to optimistic changes. They need to overcome by themselves, as to enjoy the best life ever.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 83, Rule ID: ABOUT_WHO_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'of whom to'?
Suggestion: of whom to
...ull of mystery and beautiful. We dreamt of who to become, of places to go, of the relatio...
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Line 4, column 154, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'belonged'.
Suggestion: belonged
...ive day-by-day in a place they were not belong to and in the jobs they did not deserve...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, however, if, so, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1380.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 271.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09225092251 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05734859645 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87126606022 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.619926199262 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 441.9 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 5.43587174349 239% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 1.0 0.384769539078 260% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.4902077644 49.4020404114 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.25 106.682146367 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9375 20.7667163134 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.9375 7.06120827912 27% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169325378969 0.244688304435 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0523952111787 0.084324248473 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0566172362769 0.0667982634062 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0851551552974 0.151304729494 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0423844658151 0.056905535591 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 13.0946893788 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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