As children become adults, their social behaviour changes in some ways.What are the main differences between young children’s social behaviour and that of adults? To what extent are the changes that take place good?

Essay topics:

As children become adults, their social behaviour changes in some ways.

What are the main differences between young children’s social behaviour and that of adults? To what extent are the changes that take place good?

Although some people would argue that we don't change in any fundamental ways as we develop from young children to adults, I feel there are some marked differences in our social behaviour as we get older.

Firstly, most young children tend to express themselves much more openly than they do when older, showing great extremes of happiness and misery. However, when they are adults they learn to hide their real feelings. This can mean that children have very volatile relationships - for example, groups of youngsters will often fall out and row with each other at one moment, and then immediately afterwards they have mended their differences and are back as close companions. Some people say this change in behaviour is good, that showing extreme feelings is selfish and being a member of any community requires moderation of expression. Other people condemn this change, saying childish openness about feelings is more honest and as such, it should be valued. In many cultures there are proverbs which say something like 'truth comes from mouths of the very young', and adults sometimes lament the fact that they no longer feel things as deeply as they did when they were children. They regard this as a great loss.

In my view, it is a good thing if adults can retain some childlike qualities in their social behaviour throughout their life. I feel that, within reason, it is healthy to show feelings openly because it leads to stronger relationships. However, adults should always keep in mind the consequences of expressing what they feel the moment they feel it. They need to realise that sometimes saying what they feel is simply selfish and if it hurts others, then they should keep their thoughts to themselves.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...lthough some people would argue that we dont change in any fundamental ways as we de...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, so, then, for example, i feel, in my view

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 24.0651302605 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1436.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 289.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96885813149 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48743811878 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.588235294118 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 418.5 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.8091873284 49.4020404114 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.666666667 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0833333333 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.83333333333 7.06120827912 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21415073583 0.244688304435 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0802072495704 0.084324248473 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0784235186462 0.0667982634062 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168536847749 0.151304729494 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0521841337184 0.056905535591 92% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 50.2224549098 128% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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