Some say that because many people are living much longer, the age at which people retire from work should be raised considerably. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some think that the retirement age should be increased as the lifespan of people has gone up significantly. I totally agree with this opinion since it will reduce the old age stress by a great extent. Many seniors are facing loneliness and financial difficulties due to early retirement. This essay explains how increasing the retirement age makes life less stressful and more joyous for seniors.

Raising / increasing the retirement age will definitely help old people to gain financial independence. As they grow older, there are more chances of medical issues and the need for money is high. Thus earning their own livelihood will give them the confidence that they can survive independently. Older people do not want to be a burden for their children.

Not only that, old people have much time to travel and explore new places, and hence having their own income will give them an opportunity to live their life as they wish. It should also be noted that thanks to their business lifestyle, young people cannot spend much time with their parents and grandparents. This bothers the old parents who stay at home all day and long for the attention of their family. Hence, working for a few more years beyond the existing retirement age may help them to focus on different activities and worry less about the family time spent with their children or grandchildren.

In conclusion, raising the age of retirement will benefit the old people in several ways and reduce their financial stress and mental trauma. So I firmly believe that this viable option would be advantageous to seniors. However, care should be taken that working at such an advanced age does not turn out to be physically strenuous to them. Rather it should only help them to live a happier and healthier life.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 342, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Rather,
...out to be physically strenuous to them. Rather it should only help them to live a happ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, however, if, may, so, thus, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1483.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 301.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.926910299 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61044994736 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.578073089701 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 455.4 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.5144666826 49.4020404114 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.6875 106.682146367 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8125 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.375 7.06120827912 48% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254706591362 0.244688304435 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0887539078908 0.084324248473 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0668028530318 0.0667982634062 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166433111258 0.151304729494 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0377030931711 0.056905535591 66% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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