Children should do organized activities in their free time while others believe children should be free to do what they want. Discuss both views and give your opinion?
There a hotly debated issue today related to whether the children should be required to take part in organized activities by their parents or they should be left alone to do what they want. In this essay, I am going to discuss both point of views and explain why I show preference to the latter opinion.
There are many culprits why children should be free to choose their activities. Firstly, it enhances the effect of releasing tension and create more energy. This is because If parents control kids’ activities, they may feel restricted and limited. This can even provoke conflicts between family’s member and if such issues are not resolved completely, there may be other negative consequences like rebellious behavior. The second reason is that children are able to fine their talent that the guardian often overlook and disapprove of. For example, Henry Moore, a famous person who is know for his talent in art. At first, he was a teacher due to his father’s wish but later then he abandoned it an started his art career and got resounding success. This may not happen if he continuously obeyed his father.
On the other hand, people believed that following the organized activities have many merits. This is because parents are more experienced in social skills, hence they can control what is the most beneficial for kids’ development, not only in education but also in various aspects. Secondly, if parents let children play independently, they can strike up a relationship with bad friends on the Internet, thus affect their behavior, thinking and provoke social evils like pilferage.
In conclusion, I think that both point of view has their benefits. However, I am inclined to the latter opinion because it not only helps children to recharge effectively but also give them a chance to develop their talent.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, then, thus, for example, i think, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1528.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 305.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00983606557 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17902490978 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66791379957 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.606557377049 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 472.5 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.7153597446 49.4020404114 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.866666667 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3333333333 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.73333333333 7.06120827912 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.325582539756 0.244688304435 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0933960960413 0.084324248473 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106010921059 0.0667982634062 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.199496644402 0.151304729494 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.113326210996 0.056905535591 199% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.0946893788 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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