Children should do organized activities in their free time while others believe children should be free to do what they want. Discuss both views and give your opinion?
Activities in children’s spare time are considered as a controversial topic, some people propose that children should be encourage to engage in organized group activities. Whereas, other contend that everyone should be made free to follow their own interests. In this essay, I would discuss on both aspects of the matter before presenting my own opinion.
On the one hand, taking part in organized activities have certainly immerse benefits for children. Organized activities would make an important contribution to children’s comprehensive development, particularly soft skills like solving problems, cooperation and so on. To be illustrate, when one has a valuable chance to attend summer camping programs with their peers, it is more likely to help them integrate oneself into new environment without difficulty. Moreover, those organized activities like an aforementioned one would give adequate room for children to learn team building activities which get them involved in a group competing with other, coping up with problems, etc. By doing so, they can gain valuable experiences that play a pivotal role for their future in on terms of studying and working.
On the other hand, I find myself in completely agreement with the alternative view that freedom of choice enables children to develop their unique talents. Because each child has different interest in his or her free time so it is considered as an unwise route if children are forced to do activities which they have no interest in. By doing so, it is possible to lead to resentment and be counter-productive. Choosing productive leisure activities independently give children global opportunities to chase their hobbies and reach their goals. As can be seen from newspapers or scientist journal, a lot of people gained outstanding achievement in their own fields owing to fostering their passionate for interests in childhood stages.
In conclusion, I shed some light on spending spare time on activities what children are really into. Because the positive effects on their overall personality. It finds easier for them to discover hidden talents.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 122, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'encouraged'?
Suggestion: encouraged
... people propose that children should be encourage to engage in organized group activities...
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Line 1, column 132, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'engaging'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'encourage' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: engaging
...opose that children should be encourage to engage in organized group activities. Whereas,...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 173, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...o engage in organized group activities. Whereas, other contend that everyone should be ...
^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 69, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'immersed'.
Suggestion: immersed
... in organized activities have certainly immerse benefits for children. Organized activ...
^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 573, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to team'
Suggestion: to team
...ive adequate room for children to learn team building activities which get them invo...
^^^^
Line 4, column 102, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...tivities what children are really into. Because the positive effects on their overall p...
^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 214, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...er for them to discover hidden talents.
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, moreover, really, so, whereas, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1797.0 1615.20841683 111% => OK
No of words: 332.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.41265060241 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07532775557 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.60843373494 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 561.6 506.74238477 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.7354889969 49.4020404114 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.3125 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.75 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 7.06120827912 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.391710708679 0.244688304435 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113002926011 0.084324248473 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0644711966838 0.0667982634062 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.226148522076 0.151304729494 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0846914091959 0.056905535591 149% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.81 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 122, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'encouraged'?
Suggestion: encouraged
... people propose that children should be encourage to engage in organized group activities...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 132, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'engaging'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'encourage' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: engaging
...opose that children should be encourage to engage in organized group activities. Whereas,...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 173, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...o engage in organized group activities. Whereas, other contend that everyone should be ...
^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 69, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'immersed'.
Suggestion: immersed
... in organized activities have certainly immerse benefits for children. Organized activ...
^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 573, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to team'
Suggestion: to team
...ive adequate room for children to learn team building activities which get them invo...
^^^^
Line 4, column 102, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...tivities what children are really into. Because the positive effects on their overall p...
^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 214, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...er for them to discover hidden talents.
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, moreover, really, so, whereas, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1797.0 1615.20841683 111% => OK
No of words: 332.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.41265060241 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07532775557 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.60843373494 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 561.6 506.74238477 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.7354889969 49.4020404114 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.3125 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.75 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 7.06120827912 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.391710708679 0.244688304435 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113002926011 0.084324248473 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0644711966838 0.0667982634062 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.226148522076 0.151304729494 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0846914091959 0.056905535591 149% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.81 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.