A country should spend money on skills training or vocational training for practical work, rather than on university education. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Many people think that authorities should use money for developing skills training or vocational training rather than University education. I strongly agree with this idea given how skilled workers bring benefits to their company and this change can tackle the fact that there is graduate unemployment, but a shortage of skilled workers.
Firstly, it is clear that the real working environment requires people who can really do their jobs. Nowadays, many companies are seeking for applicants who have experience about their fields. Moreover, when it comes to working, skilled workers are always preferred than graduate fresher with no experience. My cousin, for instance, applied to an IT vocational college after graduating high school. When he went to a back-end developer interview in a local IT company, he was immediately chosen over 5 applicants graduating from well-known university. This example clearly shows how skilled workers can fulfill the needs of companies in modern life.
Secondly, the number of graduate students out-numbered that of people who choose to go for skills training courses. In fact, almost all of people believe that there is only acceptable choice after high school is going to University, very few people considers to go to vocational college for a specific job. For example, in Vietnam, the percentage of graduate students who found a job is 70%, compared to 95% in that of vocational students. This situation leads to the problem of being too many chiefs, not enough Indians.
In conclusion, for the reasons I mentioned above, I believe that more money should be spent on training skills for practical working environment than teaching theoretical knowledge in University.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: considers going; considers gonna
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1442.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 270.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.34074074074 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05360046442 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82227082684 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 176.041082164 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.6 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 436.5 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.0713860046 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.923076923 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7692307692 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.23076923077 7.06120827912 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264255849123 0.244688304435 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0939867579602 0.084324248473 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.113119677584 0.0667982634062 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191139133198 0.151304729494 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0973784546348 0.056905535591 171% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.84 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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