The crime rate among teenagers has increased dramatically in many countries Discuss some possible reasons for this increase and suggest solutions

It should be significantly concerned by us that the teenager crime rate spirals up in many places in the world. The main reasons contribute to this issue are from the family, schools and our society. Moreover, all three of them should cooperate to improve this unsusal phenomenon.

Firstly, the family is the fort of teenagers. While nowadays we can find lots of teenagers could not get the right support from their home like before. More and more parents divorced due to various reasons, the harm to the youth will be enlarged, many of whom want to revenge to the society as the scapegoat. Besides, The poor family economic situation could result in the the teenagers to violate the laws for money.

Secondly, the lost supervison in schools would contribute to the school bullying. Some students would like to find the feelings of priority on their peers. Without essential focus from the teachers, these students would go faster to the path of crime.

Thirldly, the rapid development of the society without sufficient rules to protect these teenagers from making faults is aonther crucial reason for the rocket up teenager crime rate. On one hand, the teenagers today could get heterogenious kinds of informations and resources from the society much more easily than before. Lacking of judgements, many of them would do something harmful, perhaps merely due to curiosities. On the other hand, the society rules including laws are not compatible with this fast-changing environments. As a consequence, the cost of teenagers crime is much lower than adults due to some flaws.

However, the family, schools and society should play the right roles in preventing high-rising teenager crime rate. Working together, the parents should take full resposibilies to their children, the schools should take more care of the students from bullying others, the society should improve the laws to adapt the new phenomenon at present.

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Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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...mily economic situation could result in the the teenagers to violate the laws for money...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, while, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1624.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 313.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18849840256 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67047552638 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539936102236 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 485.1 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 13.0 2.52805611222 514% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.3355356392 49.4020404114 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.5294117647 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4117647059 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.82352941176 7.06120827912 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168575397047 0.244688304435 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0561323755849 0.084324248473 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0491618031753 0.0667982634062 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0938151384544 0.151304729494 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0536761739083 0.056905535591 94% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.0946893788 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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